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Hey so when r u gonna finish 7 n more too 8 been dying to read the rest

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You liar.  You're all about as patient as a Florida driver stuck in afternoon rush hour traffic.


The rest of what he said, however, is true.  You will get to read more of year 7 when the PRM folks can read more of year 8.  Anything else is, in my opinion, unfair.

Eric Storm

Well, I am patiently waiting... admittedly by rereading Terry Goodkind's Sword of Truth series.

Are you sure it was accidental? 

Chrome has a major flaw in it whereby the calendar cannot be saved properly from my calendar-creation page.  I caught it when I did the WAY8 calendar, but missed it with the WAY7 one.

It has now been updated. (I had to use IE to save it.  Ick.)

Eric Storm

Most violent death is a needless waste of life.

Eric Storm

So you caught Cat Mandu... but you never caught Cat Arpilla?



Eric Storm

Eric Storm wrote:

So you caught Cat Mandu... but you never caught Cat Arpilla?



Eric Storm

It's these little things that I enjoy finding sprinkled through your works

Honest reaction would be the one as written, the murderer line in my opinion. Yes making a little girl cry would probably be in the back of his head (at least you portrayed him in the manner of caring for little ones more). But he’s a cop through and through at this point. Murder is the worst he’s going to probably deal with and is the most honest reaction to solve it then.

I think the initial version is too emotional in this scenario. All the other cases are “hands off† emotionally, and you still get that when David calls him a murderer. But finding the little girl does change the view point to more serious, without bogging it down.

I think there’s a chance to still use a similar line when Wyatt is being interviewed to drive home it became more serious right then? It could be overkill since he didn’t know he even killed him.

Bwsc:  I think you may need a re-read.  David is not always stoic in the face of his cases.  The rape case in book 6 royally pissed him off because he could do nothing to help the woman.  Any case involving The Clan had David borderline raging.  During the kidnapping of Kristen Bullock, he took down the Sheriff's office because they pissed him off.  He read McKenna the riot act more than once during the divisional audit.  David is NOT a particularly calm person: if you piss him off, you are going to know it, and that changes little if you are a suspect.

But your other point actually argues against your choice.  David has dealt with murderers before.  Why would this guy suddenly being obviously guilty of murder, change anything?  David's been frustrated about the disappearances for months at this point, so why would this man's death have so much of an impact?

On the other hand, the man had just presented David with a collateral-damage victim that would likely trigger his "Child in Trouble" mode.  There is finally a victim whose pain he can see and feel.

This is precisely why I went back and forth on it for so long.  I chose to show David keeping himself in control of his emotions... but I have high doubts that the character actually would have.

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Barbarian3165 wrote:

It's been a while since I reread Wayward, except for the most recent snippets you've put out there, but I actually probably would of considered combining the two.

David Growled, "Not only did the motherfucker make a little girl cry on my watch, but he's also a murderer now."

Well, but how long has it been since you read WOODWARD?


And, the line you suggest removes the impact of both statements entirely.  To combine them and still keep the power behind it, it would have to be something more like this:

Rewrite To Combine wrote:

"Up till now we've been speculating about his motives, what he was doing with the victims.  Well, one thing's for damned sure."

"What?"

"He's now a murderer."

Joe grunted in understanding.

"Oh, and one more thing," David growled.

"What?"

"No motherfucking son of a bitch makes a little girl cry on my watch."

This leaves David's "cop self" first, letting him be logical and calm... and then reminds us that David is not always calm, cool, and collected, and when that dragon gets let loose, you'd better not be in its path.

Eric Storm

Personally, I think you got it right with what was published.

I have a question that might have been asked already during this thread but I haven’t been able to find it scrolling through so I apologize if I’m rehashing it, hypothetically speaking, wouldn’t David have been able to ghost himself and joe to run? I might be over thinking this from another piece of content I read elsewhere. Obviously that’s the easy way out but in the heat of the moment of course it’s an outlying thought. I don’t want to seem like I'm belittling the story. It’s fantastic! But later, on in WA8, couldn’t that be the biggest regret? I’m more interested in your thought process on how made it so compelling for me to forget that was even a possibility till months later (me personally thinking about it).

I must have blocked that from memory and didn’t even realize that was straight up stated that way. My bad!

Also, BWSC is where I played soccer growing up, and I just kinda stuck with the initials because it’s unique instead of my own personal, Brentwood Soccer Club. Funny thing though, it doesn’t even exist anymore 😂 it merged with another local club and is a totally different name and banner.