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#1 2025-04-06 12:26:35
Old Enough
Old Enough
At only nine years old, naughty twin sisters wish they were old enough to drink, smoke, and fuck.
Santa gives them the perfect gift.
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#2 Yesterday 03:36:17
- Dadrepus
- Wasted
- Registered: 2023-01-11
- Posts: 139
Re: Old Enough
You need to fix this story and get their ages right. One paragraph you say they are barely past 9 but then Santa says they are 14. Pick one and stick to it.
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#3 Yesterday 21:01:58
- CreepyUnclePete
- Inebriated
- Registered: 2023-01-12
- Posts: 29
Re: Old Enough
@Dadrepus
Thanks for pointing out the mistake.
I fixed it, and re-wrote a few other things to make this mediocre story better.
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