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#1 2023-02-14 16:47:45

Bridget
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2269 Red Oak Road

2269 Red Oak Road

A retired Sheriff's Deputy starts an online entertainment company, and hires several ladies recently paroled from prison. He takes sexy care of his camgirl employees and their teen daughters, since he's a "nice guy".

(Includes several scenes with teens drinking, smoking, or screwing. If that would bother you, read something else.)


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#2 2025-01-17 16:02:54

temnix
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Re: 2269 Red Oak Road

A couple of years have passed. Still, I'll comment. I enjoyed this story, and especially because the main character is indeed sleazy and manipulative. That all those women and girls come to be dependent on him is delightful. I'm thinking of reading "Pimpology," that famous manual for controlling the female sex. Not that it's a practical prospect for me, but it should be appealing. As to flaws, a slower development would have been more convincing. Especially in the last part, six, I think, where the dude jumps to marrying both of the daughters and instituting some kind of all-together harem. There is no build-up to that. Also the guy is much too restrained about sex with the "underage" girls. They begin to come on to him, he gets opportunities a-plenty, yet he still plays the strange "victim of a rape" game, even on his own premises and when no one involved would turn him in. He is also unfathomably rich, doling out handouts in the tens of thousands towards the end. That also works against the main driver of attraction here, which is a semi-realistic premise of a guy cleverly suborning several women. When I believe this might happen, I stay turned on and follow, when I realize he is turning into a Sultan of an Island of Dreams, my opinion wilts.

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#3 2025-01-25 05:16:14

CreepyUnclePete
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Registered: 2023-01-12
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Re: 2269 Red Oak Road

@Temnix
Thanks for sharing your thoughts and opinions. That's a totally fair review and I mostly agree. I had a new idea and was rushing to finish up the story, so I could start a new one.
I may fix this story if I ever find the inspiration and time.

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