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#1 2023-11-04 01:44:28
Ben and Jen Start the MMT
Ben and Jen Start the MMT
Ben is a tired and frustrated middle-aged man who has lost interest in what's important to him, until a witchy woman gives him a Beatle-esque nudge to put him back on the path. Jen is a young girl who is smart in all the right ways and longs to experience love, but is also wary of guys and their groping animal nature. Wind 'em up, sprinkle some fairy dust on 'em, and watch 'em go.
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#2 2023-11-07 01:17:07
- Dadrepus
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Re: Ben and Jen Start the MMT
Petty lovely story so far. Looking forward to seeing where you will go with it.
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#3 2023-11-10 04:33:52
- coeur_minuit
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Re: Ben and Jen Start the MMT
Dadrepus, thank you so much for that; it's the encouragement I needed to continue. I had originally thought of this as being 12 chapters, but the more I think about the witchy nature of their catalyst (Lilith), the more I realize it's going to be 8 chapters, following the 8 Sabbats and Esbats observed by Wiccans. This first chapter will be Lughnasadh (August 1st) and will wind up on Litha (Summer solstice), and will see them drawn further and further into the magickal realm. I hope to recapture some of the magick I felt when I first "came home" to Wicca some thirty years ago (sadly, AFTER I had married a mundane and was forbidden to express myself). I hope to be caught up with Ben and Jen's adventures by Yule and then follow them 'real-time' until we finally came out on Litha. And YOU, my dear Dadrepus, haven given me the Dadre-push I needed to move forward. Again, you have my thanks!
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#4 2024-08-25 10:09:48
- Sam Spayed
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Re: Ben and Jen Start the MMT
This is a sweet story. Thanks for writing it.
The only criticism I can make is that it needs more paragraphing. Those two big ones are particularly formidable but there are other cases where the actor changes part-way through.
There are no other faults though. The writing is good, the plot is cohesive and, in its own world, it is believable.
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