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#1 2024-04-21 18:11:54
New Beginning, The
The New Beginning
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#2 2024-04-22 20:21:26
- Raincheck
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- Registered: 2023-05-10
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Re: New Beginning, The
Why is the story info only showing the last chapter? How are we supposed to read chapters 1-4?
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#3 2024-04-23 00:36:52
- Saran
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Re: New Beginning, The
Go to the author's story page ass each of his chapters are in books individually.
Donkeyside6543: You should add new chapters to the SAME story so they are all together instead of separated as you've done. Makes it more clear it's all one book.
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#4 2024-06-01 15:40:10
- Limnophile
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Re: New Beginning, The
You have many creative ideas, Donkey. As a writer myself, I know even constructive criticism can sting sometimes. Please understand I mean to be friendly and helpful. It took me far to long to improve my writing from "Painfully Godawful" to "Slightly Above Average", and I know change can be difficult.
Just my opinion, but I think the biggest thing you can do to improve your stories would be adding more conversation.
(I said, "You're so hot! I'd love a blowjob.") works better than (I thought she was hot and asked her to blow me.)
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#5 2025-06-26 00:08:59
- hst666
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Re: New Beginning, The
Saran wrote:
Go to the author's story page ass each of his chapters are in books individually.
Donkeyside6543: You should add new chapters to the SAME story so they are all together instead of separated as you've done. Makes it more clear it's all one book.
Not sure if what's present is changed, but I only see one "serial/novel" and 1 chapter thereof (chapter 5). Chapters 1-4 do not appear anywhere on the story page.
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