Bridget
Barmaid
Member since 2006-Sep-9
Posts: 869
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Misty
My original intent when I drafted the first scene of this new story was to write a story without underage content, as that taboo subject has become a focus of both of my current stories. Taboo and Mind-control are really the primary kinks I like to write to. Underage and Incest just seem to find their way into those stories kind of easy.
Synopsis:
Matt Ackermann AKA Scott Tanner ran away from home just before high school graduation when his childhood crushed married his abusive brother. Now years later Matt writing as Scott Tanner is a successful and famous author. He is living on top of the world. He has everything a man could want except her. And his world is about to be turned upside down.. Again.
TAGS:
The above listed tags are "Current" I will add more tags as more parings and relevant codes make sense.
WARNING: This story contains NTR elements.
FEEDBACK:
Feedback is requested and welcome. If you use the sites feedback mechanism please do not use the private option. I do not seem to get those. Public posts are fine. or you can find me on the Mystic Wolf Discord server. I am quite active there.
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JustLucky
Inebriated
Member since 2021-Oct-11
Posts: 44
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That was a wild opening chapter!
(posted from Misty)
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abaddon.pale
Contributor
Member since 2018-Sep-11
Posts: 90
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JustLucky wrote:That was a wild opening chapter!
(posted from Misty)
THANK YOU for the feedback JustLucky! I live for feedback. Especialy given this story is a bit of a departure from my other two.
I have Chapter 2 written in Draft 2... I need to give it a few more edit passes before its ready for publishing.
I also have the first two sections of Chapter 3 written. I plan to publish them both at the same time with 2 being open and 3 being PRM.
Back on Bliss next, then back to Cabal.
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JustLucky
Inebriated
Member since 2021-Oct-11
Posts: 44
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If this isnt the hottest new story in The Pub id be bloody surprised...
AP you've outdone yourself, the story arc and subplots have kept me glued to the screen :-)
(posted from Recovery)
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abaddon.pale
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Member since 2018-Sep-11
Posts: 90
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JustLucky wrote:If this isnt the hottest new story in The Pub id be bloody surprised... AP you've outdone yourself, the story arc and subplots have kept me glued to the screen :-)
(posted from Recovery)
Thank you JL for your very kind words.
I would also like to thank Eric Storm, Saran, Dadrepus and and Vash the Stampede, all of whom gave me some suggestions for improving bits here and there.
I have to admit I am enjoying the writing of this story. Not that I have lost passion for Cabal and Bliss. I will be putting out a couple of chapters of Bliss next. Then Back to Misty, Then Back to Cabal.
@JustLucky I'm active on the MWP Discord Server. If you want to IM me from there with any notes or suggestions on the story.. Please do. I cannot prommise to take all suggestions. but if I can work something into the story for you I will.
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sadimlonely
Inebriated
Member since 2024-Aug-11
Posts: 17
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I'm enjoying the story - and look forward to reading more - but it could seriously use an editor.
I lost count of the number of "your" instead of "you're", "steel" where it should be "steal", "dieing" instead of "dying" etc.
Each time it pulled me out of the story - and that's why I've given it a rating of 3, rather than a 4 or 5.
(posted from Recovery)
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Eric Storm
Pub Owner
Member since 2006-Sep-13
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sadimlonely wrote:that's why I've given it a rating of 3, rather than a 4 or 5.
Well, now that would be a neat trick, since there is no numerical rating system on the site...
I would think that, if you intend on reading further, it would at least warrant a "Definitely worth my time", since those ratings are not intended to rank stories, they're intended to help you find similar stories. Under-rating it because of mechanics only hurts your recommended reading list.
Eric Storm
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abaddon.pale
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Member since 2018-Sep-11
Posts: 90
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sadimlonely wrote:I'm enjoying the story - and look forward to reading more - but it could seriously use an editor.
I lost count of the number of "your" instead of "you're", "steel" where it should be "steal", "dieing" instead of "dying" etc.
Each time it pulled me out of the story - and that's why I've given it a rating of 3, rather than a 4 or 5.
(posted from Recovery)
Thanks for the feedback sadimlonely,
Spelling has always been a huge challenge for me. I do run my stories through multiple edit passes using AI Grammar tools and text to speech ( so I can listen to how it sounds ) and make lot of edits before post. But Even AI tools seem to have trouble finding those kinds of errors. Obviously I'm a phonetic speller. But I will try to do better. and I will go back and give these chapters anotehr edit pass ASAP.
I am currently working on the next two chapters of Misty. but I need to get back to Bliss and Cabal after that.
Abaddon.
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Sam Spayed
Contributor
Member since 2024-Aug-25
Posts: 32
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I am greatly enjoying this story.
One minor point - Stockholm Syndrome has been credibly debunked. It turns out that the psychologist who wrote the original paper had issues and the authorities, when ending the hostage situation, endangered the hostages more than their captors did. A detective could still think such a book would be useful, however.
(posted from Recovery)
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JustLucky
Inebriated
Member since 2021-Oct-11
Posts: 44
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HOLY shit!
There HAS to be more to this story :-)
(posted from Recovery)
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abaddon.pale
Contributor
Member since 2018-Sep-11
Posts: 90
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Sam Spayed wrote:I am greatly enjoying this story.
One minor point - Stockholm Syndrome has been credibly debunked. It turns out that the psychologist who wrote the original paper had issues and the authorities, when ending the hostage situation, endangered the hostages more than their captors did. A detective could still think such a book would be useful, however.
(posted from Recovery)
Sam.
THANKS! for the outstanding feedback.
Yes I agree on both counts.. While I was not aware that Stockholm Syndrome has been debunked. It is still valid that the Detective and others would still believe in it. Furthermore there is validity to some aspects of it. People fall in love with their abusers all the freaking time. It has to do with the breakdown of the ego and self esteem. Regardless... Not sure if you picked up on it or not... but Stockholm, Operaent etc none of that is really whats going on here. 
I think I have dropped enough clues but more are coming in chapters 4-6.
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abaddon.pale
Contributor
Member since 2018-Sep-11
Posts: 90
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JustLucky wrote:HOLY shit! There HAS to be more to this story :-)
(posted from Recovery)
THANKS Lucky!
I am working on chapters 4-6 now.. I took a long break from writing over the summer... life has a way of getting in the way.
I just re-post chapters 1-3 because I did a lot of editing on them.. No real content changes but a lot of text cleanup.
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Maverick7508
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Member since 2012-Feb-4
Posts: 65
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Nicely written AP. I really enjoyed the story this far(actually lost sleep because I couldn't stop reading) and I am looking forward to the rest of the story.
(posted from the Item Information Page)
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abaddon.pale
Contributor
Member since 2018-Sep-11
Posts: 90
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Maverick7508 wrote:Nicely written AP. I really enjoyed the story this far(actually lost sleep because I couldn't stop reading) and I am looking forward to the rest of the story.
(posted from the Item Information Page)
Thank you Maverick...
I am working on chap 4-6 now.
Is there anything specific you like about the story? Plot Points, Character elements etc. Let me know.
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