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Eric, I just noticed something on my umpteenth readthrough of this chapter -- I am constantly re-reading your works due to the enjoyment that I get from them.
On the Sunday after Hannah's birthday, Jennifer rents a small moving van to move Hannah's stuff from the warehouse to the main house.
My question is: why rent a moving van when the Berculosi trucks are available to the owner of the company (and were used to get the Units to the city buildings just a short time before)?

(posted from Chapter 25)

Well going to comment on the latest chapter.   Still great as always.  Keep on keeping on.

(posted from the Item Information Page)

If you've got ideas for things, you know my email address. 

Eric Storm

I have read Agent of Change from beginning to end and I have enjoyed the theme, the interaction of the characters, and the plots and twists in the story.  I feel it is to bad it has to be fiction we could use "SALT"  to teach us some compassion and how to run our lives with out hate or anger.  Of course the persona interactions of the cast was very riveting to say the least.  A must read as far as i am concerned.

(posted from Chapter 27)

donkeyside6543 wrote:

I have read Agent of Change from beginning to end...

Really?  You've read it to the end?  Could you contact me by email and let me know what the ending is, 'cause I'm a little stuck on it...

 

Eric Storm

Thank you,
I am enjoying this story more than I thought I would

(posted from Chapter 22)

Eric Storm wrote:

fathertyme wrote:

I am enjoying this story more than I thought I would

Not quite sure how to take that comment, but glad you're enjoying it, anyway...


Eric Storm

It is not really the type of story I generally enjoy.

But I find I am enjoying it all the same

Loving the chapters.  I usually re-read all the chapters when you post a new chapter to refresh all the goings on that is happening in Nicks life.  Waiting to find out what happens in the fertility clinic.  Keep up the fantastic work.

(posted from the Item Information Page)

Just read my way through the 23 non-premium chapters.

Well written, Eric, and I'm keen to read more.

My only criticism is that in a couple of chapters (can't remember exactly which ones) there's one or two lines where a character called "David" is named, but the context suggests that the name is meant to be "Nick".

Yeah, what he said! 

Seriously, once you spend a decade writing stories about one character, it can be hard to get their name out of your head when you're writing.  I'll fix that typo eventually.

Eric Storm

I enjoyed this.
Nick is rather a prude at the start and relaxes throughout. The dialogue is good and natural and the descriptions are adequate to set the scene.The sex scenes are vivid, realistic and immersive.
The only sticking point I found is that the dialogue with the alien is far less realistic. I imagine it was difficult to write; I don't fancy tackling it myself. It feels staged.
However it was a good decision to introduce us to the world and the possibilities before that point. Having enjoyed ourselves in the beginning of the story, we are prepared to sit through the info-dump. Nicely done.

(posted from Chapter 1)

Nice varied chapter with each scene leading naturally on to the next. There are a lot of threads here but they are handled well.
Still some issues with direct dialogue but far less than in previous chapters.
I'm still reading.

(posted from Chapter 3)