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#1 2011-02-28 01:17:05

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Finding Yourself in High School

Finding Yourself in High School

What if a high school student could control people with his mind?

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#2 2011-02-28 02:25:14

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Re: Finding Yourself in High School

About Finding Yourself in High School

Sometimes the way forward is to go back to the beginning.

Mind-control stories are some of my earliest favorites. The high school mind controller in particular is a familiar and favorite subject. But when I started writing, I kind of skipped that first step of writing that version of myself.

I haven't published anything in a long time, because I haven't successfully written anything in a long time. I've been thinking about it, but I always get hung up on some stupid plot problem, or I start writing and get stuck grasping for a sentence or a word that I don't immediately hate. I'd put one story aside and try another, and get stuck again. Stories taunt my faded concentration and lack of discipline. So when all else failed I thought I'd start with something new yet familiar.

But this isn't my first attempt at this story. I started thinking about doing my own take on the high school mind controller in '04, had the idea for the opening chapter in '06, and took a serious run at the full-blown story in early '08. I even wrote substantial portions of a few chapters before I ran out of steam, everything seemed to suck, and I went looking for writing mojo elsewhere.

I didn't even look at it again until a few weeks ago. And something just clicked. Maybe it's nostalgia, maybe it's the perverse joy of knowing what happens and wanting to share it, maybe it's just desperation, but whatever it is I'm going to milk it for all it's worth. Because writing is hard, but the result is immensely satisfying.

I hope you enjoy this new trip in a familiar vehicle.

And I hope I do the genre justice.

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#3 2011-02-28 04:54:22

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Re: Finding Yourself in High School

I don't want to spoil anything, so all I'm going to say is the ending of the prologue is Mean!  You are obligated to provide the next chapter post-haste, dammit.


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#4 2011-02-28 09:13:19

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Re: Finding Yourself in High School

I really liked the chapter and can't wait to see what you do with it.

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Jigsaw: If you're good at anticipating the human mind. It leaves nothing to chance

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#5 2011-02-28 15:00:29

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#6 2011-03-01 05:43:00

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Re: Finding Yourself in High School

I'm enjoying this

Nice open


"A scrupulous writer, in every sentence that he writes, will ask himself at least four questions, thus: 1. What am I trying to say? 2. What words will express it? 3. What image or idiom will make it clearer? 4. Is this image fresh enough to have an effect?" - George Orwell, Politics and the English Language, 1946

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#7 2011-03-02 03:09:01

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Re: Finding Yourself in High School

I like it so far. I can't wait to see what happens and if Brandon figures out what he is doing.

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Jigsaw: If you're good at anticipating the human mind. It leaves nothing to chance

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#8 2011-03-23 23:11:31

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Re: Finding Yourself in High School

Yay!!! Brandon is my name, and the name is a character with powers! Woot!

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#9 2011-03-23 23:27:48

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Re: Finding Yourself in High School

This chapter made me smile from ear to ear

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#10 2011-03-23 23:41:00

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Re: Finding Yourself in High School

I can relate to taco tuesdays 3dsmile (man,this story seems eerily familiar and dejavu-like to me, without the mind control...)

(posted from Taco Night)


Who is General Failure, and why is he reading my hard disk?

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#11 2011-04-04 13:54:21

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Re: Finding Yourself in High School

EXCELLENT Beginning! Jesus Christ but this brings back the bad old memories! I was a whole lot like Brandon back then, the early 70's for me. Bad enough that I understand to at least some extent todays school shootings. I hope Brandon handles it better than I might have with MC abilities. I rode a teeter-totter, depending on exactly what was going on when it popped up. A good day, I'd have come down on the relatively good side. One of the nastier days might have thrust me into the dark side, at least for a time. I'm definitely looking forward to seeing where you might go next with this, I'm Definitely adding it to my favorites!

(posted from WTF)

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#12 2011-04-04 14:11:58

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I am SO glad I had put my drink down before I got to the part of this chapter covering Sheri's drive to Brandon's house & Brandon's mental "conversation" with himself during the ride. Anybody within 20 feet of my window likely heard me giggling & snorting all through my reading of that part. And Believe me, those sounds coming from a man in his 50's are.... at least frightening.

But, Goddamn! PLEASE continue it ASAP!

(posted from Taco Night)

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#13 2011-04-20 11:35:57

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Was really good actually. The concept that he didn't realize what it was almost the whole time was good too. Though a little more detail on it would have been better.

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#14 2011-04-29 16:54:42

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Re: Finding Yourself in High School

If I told you all that the long delay between postings was part of my homage to the genre, would you believe me?

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#15 2011-12-05 08:26:09

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Re: Finding Yourself in High School

FINALLY, Brandon gets his taco. And the story gets more story codes, and a proper rating. 3dsmile
Sorry it took so long. I hope it doesn't suck.

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#16 2011-12-06 02:17:06

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Re: Finding Yourself in High School

Why would he mention the girl taking a shower to his mother??? Come on!!!

A most enjoyable read. Anxiously waiting for more.

Hurry up!!

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#17 2011-12-06 03:58:12

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Re: Finding Yourself in High School

Hair's wet, shower's wet, towel's used; sell the lie by pointing out the obvious truth.
Or, maybe part of him wants his mom to know.

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#18 2011-12-07 01:55:49

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Re: Finding Yourself in High School

Great start, The surprise ending of the prolong was quite a twist. Keep up the good work

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#19 2012-03-14 11:14:57

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Re: Finding Yourself in High School

Keep up the good work

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If they give you ruled paper, write the other way.
Grandad Rufus.

It's not that I have a dirty mind, you understand. It's just that so many of my thoughts leave muddy little footprints...

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#20 2016-08-25 10:21:46

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Re: Finding Yourself in High School

Good work. I just hope there is a continuation. This is a great start.

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#21 2016-08-26 01:45:17

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Re: Finding Yourself in High School

Good work. keep it coming.

(posted from the Item Information Page)

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#22 2017-01-20 04:46:52

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Re: Finding Yourself in High School

Great read. I can relate to this guy. My time in Jr high was quit similar unfortunately not having the esp abilities ment having to use the other talents. Keep up the good work.  Coalbuckety

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