Toy Master

Thomas Reynolds has suffered from headaches most of his life, when they were at their worst things always seemed to go his way. The headaches stopped around his fourteenth birthday after a very traumatic event. They have started back up, again triggered by a traumatic event, and things have gotten a whole lot crazier ever since. (older work, looking at re-writing the beginning and continuing. looking for feedback on current story.)

So happy to see you back man. Missed you work.

(posted from the Item Information Page)

Really awesome story. I liked the way you played Tom, not a lot of back story but you really felt like you know him.

(posted from Chapter 1: Awakening)

I can't wait for the rest of the re-worked chapters and then for the new material. You do good work man.

(posted from the Item Information Page)

Neat! Never knew that there was more then 1 chapter of this. I'm liking it so far.

The full page button is making the story just a wall of text thought. I'm going to take a wild uninformed guess that no indentation is the reason; or at least I think that would make it more readable on the full text page.

Without digging deep into the database, I can't know for sure, but from looking at the web page code for the story, it would appear that the story was submitted as plain text, rather than as an HTML file.

The full-page display seems to lack a filtering process I included in the primary display page.  I'll have to see if I can easily include that in the full-page display.

As I am currently working heavily on version 2.0 of the site, I'm not going to put too much energy into it, though, so if it's not a quick-and-easy thing to do, it ain't gonna get done.

Eric Storm

Update:

It was a VERY easy fix (just had to copy over two lines from one file to another).  The page looks better now.  This should fix any and all pages with this similar problem.

Eric Storm

PS:  Issues like this one should be posted to the Website Issues section, not to the author's or story's section.

Chapter one has reviewed a Major rewrite. I added a lot more showing and details in the beginning, I know it needs more work and I plan on doing so, but would like feedback on what was changed, what works what does not work and what changes would you like to see. What areas would you like to see expanded upon.

(posted from the Item Information Page)

Eric,

Eric Storm wrote:

...should be posted to the Website Issues section...

Crusader wrote:

...a wild uninformed guess...

James,

I owe you an apology, I never even entertained the thought that the site was somehow misbehaving, and made an assumption that it was a formatting issue.
I will strive not to do this in the future.

-Dru

Just as a note for the future:

Even if it WAS a formatting issue, you should have yelled at me, not him.  It's my job to make sure that things look right around here.  This way, if it's a site problem, the right person is tackling it out of the gate... and if it's a problem with the formatting in the file, then the author can get help from someone who knows how to fix what's wrong in technical terms.  As this incident shows, you can never really be sure where the problem lies without digging into some kind of code (even if it's just the HTML code for the story).

Basically, if the problem is anything other than something to do with the story's content, you should complain to me.  I'll spread the misery as needed.  This way the authors can focus on just doing the writing.

Not a big deal, just letting you know.

Eric Storm

Other the following I will keep the info in mind. thanks.

Eric Storm wrote:

...you should have yelled...

nope.

Far too many spelling errors, spoils the whole thing

(posted from Chapter 3: A New Life and New Wives)

And this bit of upbeat 'encouragement' will surely spur him on to improve his writing and give you more to read.

{sarcasm alert for the ironically impaired.}

Eric Storm

brewbox wrote:

Far too many spelling errors, spoils the whole thing

(posted from Chapter 3: A New Life and New Wives)

Thank you for the feedback, unfortunately I lost my main editor and sadly spelling and grammar are not my strong points.

Chapter 1 has been edited and Re-Posted.

(posted from the Item Information Page)

Since I'm a terrible speller, I would (almost) never comment on spelling but your using barley (the grain in beer) instead of barely in a couple of chapters reminded me of Vanessa Ravencroft who had the habit of making that mistake about a dozen times in each chapter.

That said, it's good to see this story back, I was bummed when you pulled most of your work off SOL. Keep up with the good work.

(posted from the Item Information Page)

Fantastic start!! I love it.

(posted from Chapter 1: Awakening)

Great chapter!!! Keep it up

(posted from Chapter 2: Discoveries and Assets)

I love this story! So far. Keep the chapters coming.

(posted from Chapter 3: A New Life and New Wives)

Fantastic story!! You should keep it going and I hope you do!!

(posted from     Chapter 5: Temptations and Titillation\)