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2021-Nov-20 @ 3:48 AM
Bridget
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2022-Nov-23 @ 7:19 PM
Degener8
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Well done. For somebody who proofreads their own work there are only a small number of errors until towards the end with the change in perspective from narrative to first person. But all in all a very enjoyable and imaginative story for anybody who is into interspecies sex. The combination of high tech gadgetry and uber intelligent dogs combines for some very unexpected results for both the subject of the story and the reader.


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Over the years I've enjoyed this site and many of the stories. This is my second attempt at writing a story for here. The first one was a miserable failure. Hopefully I learned a few things since then. Actual constructive criticism is welcome. I proof read my own material. Hopefully I catch most of my mistakes.