Julie's New Life

A young teenage girl gets caught in a comprising position with her father when her mother walks in on them. Her mother is determined that she must leave.

I hope this story has been entertaining so far. I have the next chapter mostly written. Any comments would be welcomed

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I'll be honest, I stopped reading after I realized it was written from the female point of view. Not quite my cup of tea. However what I read up to that point was well written.

Thanks for the comment. I understand everyone has their own tastes. When I started this story. It started out from the girls point of view. If I added in everyone else and with a with a running commentary I think this would end up a long novel. I wasn't prepared to write a novel at this time. Perhaps in the future. To let everyone know up to this point the sex has been minimal. The next chapter we find just how much Julie enjoys married life.

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I hope this Chapter is entertaining. It helps explain Mom's reasoning. As always comments are welcome

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I'm sorry for all the spelling and grammar mistakes. I reread each chapter several times thinking I corrected everything before posting. After rereading the chapters I've already posted I found even more errors. I'm thinking of re posting the previous chapters after some more editing. Hopefully I caught everything in this installment. Enjoy

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Just a tip about proofreading your own work:

Before you do so, set it aside for several days - maybe even a week, if you can handle sitting on it that long.  (Feel free to start writing the next chapter, or to work on something else, while waiting.  Doing so will actually help.)

The reason is that, when the story is fresh in your mind, your brain will actually see "what you meant" rather than what you typed.  If you give yourself time to "forget" exactly what you meant to say, you're more likely to actually see your mistakes.  I always give myself at least three days before doing a final proofread of a story, but that's what I consider a bare minimum.

Just my $1.50 (inflation's a bitch...)
Eric Storm

Eric, I took your advise and decided write a short story I've been thinking about for the last year or so before proofreading the next chapter. Which I should be posting in a couple of days.
Thanks.

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Sounds awesome either way you do it can’t wait to see what you come up with

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Right now, I have 3 different stories going, which looks like that's all I can handle at a time. Once I finish with one of my stories, I'll consider starting a separate story about the girls and Max. Hopefully I'll have another chapter written in the next week. Thank you for your input. I also noticed your a new member of the site. I hope you enjoy stories here, I know I have over the years.

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I removed the pedo code, as no preteen girls have been forced or coerced. That could change in future chapters. I hope everyone is enjoying the story.

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I started reading this story and could only tolerate it to the prep for the wedding.  It seemed like EVERY person Julie comes in contact with abuses,mistreats, or takes advantage of her.

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Mikenc67 wrote:

I started reading this story and could only tolerate it to the prep for the wedding.  It seemed like EVERY person Julie comes in contact with abuses,mistreats, or takes advantage of her.

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Please read the Critiquing Guide.  If you don't like a story at all, it is best not to comment on it.

Eric Storm

That is one the points of the story. I'm sorry, this isn't to your liking. Since your new to the site, I'm sure you can find many other stories that you will enjoy.

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I am enjoying this story line. I can't wait unti the next chapter comes out. You are doing fine. Thanks!

bigro wrote:

I am enjoying this story line. I can't wait unti the next chapter comes out. You are doing fine. Thanks!

I cannot agree more.

I am waiting with "Bated" breath for the next installment.

Thank you for your comment, it helps me to keep writing. I will try and get out a new chapter as soon as I can.

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