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#1 2006-11-29 04:23:31

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Lesbos Crystal, The

Kara Davenport finds a magic crystal that grants her great power.  But as the saying goes nothing is free.  Find out what price Kara must pay.

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#2 2006-12-10 06:32:44

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Re: Lesbos Crystal, The

In case anybody cares I thought I would point out the chapter 3 of this story was never posted to EWP.  There have been some downloads but I thought I would just let you all know in case you were assuming it was the same thing.


Sex isn't the answer.
Sex is the question.
Yes is the answer.

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#3 2006-12-11 05:18:53

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Re: Lesbos Crystal, The

Thanks, Storymaster. As always, great work

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#4 2006-12-11 07:21:54

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Re: Lesbos Crystal, The

Glad you liked it. 3dsmile


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#5 2006-12-30 15:35:51

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Re: Lesbos Crystal, The

Okay...I'm upset.....I mean it ...you've really done it this time.....WHERE'S THE REST OF IT?   ...can I have some more please?  3dsad    ...please?

...ppplllllleeeeeeeeeaaaaaaaaasssssssssseeeeeeeeeeeeeee?    3dbig_smile

Last edited by dv8n (2006-12-30 15:37:09)


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#6 2006-12-30 16:53:41

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Re: Lesbos Crystal, The

I'm a bit blocked with this one at the moment.  I am trying to break that block by working on another short story that I just started yesterday.  We'll just have to wait and see how it works out but please be assured I do plan on finishing this one out.

Thanks for reading.


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#7 2006-12-30 17:40:42

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Re: Lesbos Crystal, The

well beleive me It was my pleasure   hahahahah

I thought the story was cute....except for the whole "kill men" thread that seemed to keep going thru it...

*looking around nervously* you know...I'm your friend right?  3dbig_smile  please don't incinerate me  I'll be good.  I promise   

          ......well I'll try....maybe.....um can I get an extra chance just in case I screw up ..better make it 10   

3dbig_smile


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#8 2006-12-30 22:36:56

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Re: Lesbos Crystal, The

dv8n wrote:

except for the whole "kill men" thread that seemed to keep going thru it...

*looking around nervously* you know...I'm your friend right?  3dbig_smile  please don't incinerate me  I'll be good.  I promise

Seeing I'm a guy myself I can't really kill all men without killing myself.  I'm not sure however why you feel there is a "kill men" thread however.  The only men that she did kill I think deserved it and the other retribution was more a pique of annoyance that perhaps went a bit further than Kara actually would have gone if she would have thought about it.


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#9 2006-12-31 17:34:44

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Re: Lesbos Crystal, The

I'll tell you what it says I can email you...instead of tell you here so that I ruin the stories for anybody who hasn't read them I'll email you the reasons I came to my idea about that


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#10 2006-12-31 18:07:02

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Re: Lesbos Crystal, The

Sure


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#11 2007-02-16 09:17:58

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Re: Lesbos Crystal, The

Hey Storymaster69....

* you see a small child dressed in rags and REALLY BIG eyes, holding up an empty bowl labeled: The Lesbo Crystal, on the side facing you*

* Tears stream from the child's eyes*

The child sobs,"Pleez Sir, may I 'ave sum m're."


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#12 2007-02-17 05:55:10

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Re: Lesbos Crystal, The

Believe me I want to continue this story.  I am just blocked up with it.  "Shining Jewel" was my attempt on breaking that writers block but it didn't work out.


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#13 2007-02-17 21:16:52

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Re: Lesbos Crystal, The

"Blocking up" in what sense?  Can't figure out where to go next?  Too many possibilities?

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#14 2007-02-17 23:05:09

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Re: Lesbos Crystal, The

I know where I want to go with the story it is just coming up with a way to express it that doesn't feel clunky to me.

I know that with this being a fantasy story, I can get away with pretty much anything I want to.  However I still have a set of "natural" laws for this universe and I don't want to start breaking them without a damn good reason.  In the end it just makes more work for me to resolve how and why something happened.


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#15 2007-02-18 02:24:22

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Re: Lesbos Crystal, The

I'm very familiar with that feeling.  One thing that can help is writing (or at least starting to write) the next scene from a viewpoint besides that of the viewpoint character.  Even if it turns out that changing viewpoints doesn't work, getting a different look at events can help you write them from the main viewpoint.

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#16 2007-02-18 02:32:35

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Re: Lesbos Crystal, The

Well actually I am planning on writing the next part from a different POV, Arabella's to be exact.  I figure that is the best way to show what is happening without having to have Kara there herself.


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#17 2010-12-01 12:50:50

Briton4472
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Re: Lesbos Crystal, The

This is a great story, I hope you can add more to it 3dbig_smile

(posted from Chapter 3)

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#18 2010-12-04 05:28:32

Storymaster69
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Re: Lesbos Crystal, The

Thank you for reading and commenting.  I do hope I can continue this story eventually but I'm sort of stuck on it right now.


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Sex is the question.
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#19 2011-09-12 07:46:26

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Re: Lesbos Crystal, The

Fuckin fantastic my friend...I uh...heh kinda lost it at the luncheon/beach scene...that was a bit of magic right there. utterly inventive and a real delight. This is all very inspiring to me...Perhaps I should try my hand at a bit of writing. Either way, I will finish chapter 2 and 3 tomorrow at some point and post a more well rounded response. I look forward to this stories continuation. If you can get past your block...which I pray to the gods you can.

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#20 2011-09-13 05:51:12

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Re: Lesbos Crystal, The

Thanks I'm glad you enjoyed it so far 3dsmile

I hope you continue to enjoy it and that I manage to continue to peak your interest.


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Sex is the question.
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#21 2016-02-13 21:38:21

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Re: Lesbos Crystal, The

Just read this and I have really enjoyed what you've written so far. I truly hope that you continue this story at some point.

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