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#1 2012-08-15 22:17:04

Bridget
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Solomon's Daughters


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#2 2012-08-16 00:47:30

Karax
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Re: Solomon's Daughters

Sorry about the little black symbols on the first couple chapters it seems that some of the punctuation got picked up wrong by wordpad when I converted it to a .txt file.

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#3 2012-08-16 02:21:37

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So... fix it and re-upload.

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#4 2012-08-16 23:08:10

Karax
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Glitches in the first few chapters are all fixed

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#5 2012-08-17 00:18:09

Danimal
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#6 2012-08-17 02:36:10

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Please find someone to edit your post!  There is a ton of negativity and no praise in it.

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#7 2012-08-17 07:55:44

HJP1993
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you know, I just realized something. None of Ant's teachers seemed to notice that he lost weight. I could understand the ones at the high school if he'd been picking Liz up outside, but it sounded like he'd been going in so it would seem that they should have noticed him losing a lot of weight really quickly. Just thought I'd mention it 3dsmile

(posted from Patricia s Chapter)

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#8 2012-08-18 00:57:56

HJP1993
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I hope you realize that Mina's Chapter repeats 3dsmile

The end and beginning of repetition so that you can find it easier:
"Goodnight," she said to the fairies and was answered with a chorus of good nights. Curling her body around his hot one she wrapped her arm around his muscled chest and clung to him until she drifted off to sleep.Solomon's Daughters: Mina's Chapter

(posted from Mina s Chapter)

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#9 2012-08-20 20:16:06

Esuvia
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I find this story truly fascinating, good story line, nice progression. Other then the spelling i find this a real must read.

(posted from Galina s Chapter)

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#10 2012-09-04 22:21:59

Karax
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I spent more time editing Megan's Chapter so if their are any errors that you see I repeat often please tell me and I will try to not keep making them.

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#11 2012-09-05 17:08:00

celf
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i am loveing this story

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#12 2012-09-24 13:23:00

Esuvia
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I really hate my ability to read so damned fast. This story just keeps me glued to my screen, i love your story the characters are awesome, tho it really is easy for Anthony, especially the vampire coven takeover, i thought that was a bit to easy, but then again, he is a Djin lord. Keep up the great writing, i wish you would never stop this book.

(posted from Linda s Chapter)

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#13 2012-09-25 00:04:27

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Thanks I appreciate the feedback. Right now I'm trying to keep the mood of the story light later sections may not go so much in his favor.

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#14 2012-09-25 19:08:11

turshen
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Karax wrote:

Thanks I appreciate the feedback. Right now I'm trying to keep the mood of the story light later sections may not go so much in his favor.

Very entertaining.  Thanks for posting, and looking forward to more chapters!

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#15 2012-09-28 08:09:04

Aundae
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A really good story, only drawback is the spelling, the story itself is extremely interesting and I'd really like to read more of it 3dsmile
keep up the good work

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#16 2012-10-16 17:57:57

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Hey  Karax, is English your native language?  I am enjoying the story, but it has mistakes it is hard to imagine a native speaker making.  One example, "He was sit at his desk.... " Regardless, can I suggest an editor or proofreader?  Like I said, I am enjoying the imagination and plot of the story.  As well as the different characters, I have read so far.  But these mistakes actually stop the flow of the reading.  Especially glaring are the changes in tenses or in some cases, entirely missing words.

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#17 2012-10-16 18:27:25

Eric Storm
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Once again I will point out that this kind of comment should have been handled privately.

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#18 2012-11-11 09:48:23

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I am looking forward to more chapters.  when is the next chapter or more going to be posted?  I am interested to see how the human guests will react to the wedding that is likely in the next chapter.  all those girls at the weekly party and will the principal and office old lady be in attendance as well?

(posted from the Item Information Page)

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#19 2012-11-11 20:49:47

Otaku
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great new chapter with the wedding but after almost a month of no more chapters was hoping for more story.  I hoped more than one chapter would be released and more detail on developing new relationships and such.  he still hasn't been with two of the women from the weekly get togethers at cassie's and was expecting some comment about the humans shocked at the wedding, didn't liz go off to invite her friends to the wedding at the end of the last chapter?

(posted from the Item Information Page)

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#20 2012-11-11 23:29:00

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As for the inactivity I havent had any free time and there will be more chapters coming but not until the title Solomon's Daughters that will include nina and sasha and as for the rest it will be explained in the next part of the story.

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#21 2012-11-11 23:33:36

Eric Storm
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Karax wrote:

...there will be more chapters coming but not until the title Solomon's Daughters ...

Um... I'm sure I'm not the only one who wants to ask this...  WHAT?

Could you explain what you were trying to say in this sentence?

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#22 2012-11-12 03:30:45

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sorry typo I meant to say under the title Solomon's Daughter not until. This part of the story was all about introducing most of the characters and the majority of them being Solomon's Daughter that is what I named this group of chapters. The next however many chapters while the characters will remain the same will not be solely focus on the girls and Anthony's relationships with them.

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#23 2012-11-12 19:49:10

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Ahh, so you mean the chapter headings will cease to be named for the characters themselves. That seems like a normal progression. I am at Dilliah's chapter. I have learned to ignore some of the things that would detract and have totally emerced my self in your story. It is a very good story. It has reminding me of a story I have had on the back burner for some time and I might be going back to it. I have always been a fan of the Lamp of Lakesh or Solomons lamp. Keep up you writing. I look foreward to seeing the end of you story and how it develops.


In the dark your lips taste like sweet nectar, and in the line they tease me endlessly.

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#24 2012-11-12 23:53:55

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Have just finished the wedding chapter and would like to say awesome. Good work and keep up the writing.

(posted from The Wedding)


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#25 2012-11-14 17:00:22

Sirkenii
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Great work, only question is the story says its Completed? Is this just book one or will you continue with future plans?

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