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#1 2012-07-15 01:03:55

Bridget
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Academic and the Nymphomaniac, The

The Academic and the Nymphomaniac

An erotic SciFy comedy


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#2 2012-07-15 01:10:46

drgonzo1
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Re: Academic and the Nymphomaniac, The

Sorry folks in the second paragraph I meant to say "some human females" I need to slow down and edit better. My bad. DrGonzo1

(posted from Chapter 1)

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#3 2012-07-15 03:23:29

Eric Storm
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Re: Academic and the Nymphomaniac, The

Just a thought, but you might also want to write an actual story description... I haven't the faintest idea what your story is about.

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#4 2012-07-15 03:32:29

Wicked Storm
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Re: Academic and the Nymphomaniac, The

I like the premise so far Drgonzo1. However the story reads very mechanically to me. That would be my only mild critique. I have read a great many stories that are written that way so it's not a flaw at all. But just thought I'd point it out. I don't know what to suggest to make it seem lest mechanical but if a thought crosses my mind that could help and you want to hear it I will let you know. But again I like what you have put up so far. I look forward to the next chapter.


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#5 2012-07-16 01:41:55

Eric Storm
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Re: Academic and the Nymphomaniac, The

Due to some posting difficulties, I'm locking this thread in favor of the new one.

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