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Each chapter is being word count limited, for a smoother reading process. They shouldn't be more than 1-2 thousand words a chapter, so they wont be longer but they will be rapidly published. Hopefully mewhahaha.

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I have not read the chapter yet since, as I said on a different part of the forum, I don't read only the first 1-2 chapters.  Having said that though, Elessar, your third point of contention is a bit of a sticking point.  Some readers need stories to start out with explosions and other pyro, others want it to start out like The Hobbitt, most like that middle of the road.  As an example, even as a huge movie fan, I have yet to see all of Blazing Saddles because it starts so slowly that there is nothing that grabs my attention in the first 10 minutes and if a movie doesn't grab me in that 10 minutes, I will never get to watch it because when I see it on again I just skip over it since I will miss the first part.

Wicked, write for yourself and enjoy your stuff.  If you believe you might benefit from getting an editor/proofreader, do it, but don't let them run roughshod over you.  Editors can DEFINITELY do that; I know I used to do it.  I like to think that editors are writers without the imagination to create worlds, we can help bring the vision into sharper focus but we don't have the scope to have our own.

As for Elessar's 2nd point, my only recommendation is to watch it carefully.  Having really short chapters can lead to a story feeling VERY choppy.  I don't know if you are familiar with the Wheel of Time series by Robert Jordan (and if you are into high fantasy or alternate history you should read it), but book 8 of that series suffers from that a bit.  You get used to long chapters from him and then in 8 he all of a sudden has chapters that are only 8-10 pages long.  While that wouldn't be a problem in most books, in his it is because his first few books have you reading chapters in excess of 25 pages.

Good luck and thank you, just like the other authors out there, for creating and transporting us to the worlds you create.

I could argue with it but it's ultimately pointless. My personality is messed up in the way, that I enjoy arguing, even if I'm wrong.

Could I have done my post completely different? Yes absolutely, I should have done it differently. I should have added a few ideas and several positive points I liked. I apologize solely to the author for my rude comment, demanding comments to satisfy me, mostly for the fact I shouldn't have posted it in the forum and just left it in my head.

I'll further apologize to Eric for having to waste so much time explaining everything in different ways, when I should know the rules by now.(honestly haven't read them and didn't really think they were followed very well as most places are that way).

I apologize,
Elessar,

Please continue the story, try going a little slower if you can and not rush it. Relax and enjoy writing it.

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Thank you very much Eric for Moderating the comments made here. I will respond a little of my own.

Elessar I read every comment I get on these forums, maybe not daily but I make sure that I take what the reader has to say in completely. I post draft copies of my stories up here as I am writing so that my readers, have a chance to see my work as it developing. Often times, making corrections and changes to story as needed. This is the Alpha, no pun intended copy of this story. It's not even a Beta yet. So I am apologetic for my grammar errors and misspellings. I do over time clean them up and correct them. Shorter chapters will, actually assist me in this.

I don't have an active editor, or even proof readers. I do it all myself, and have a very full schedule most of the time. So that is one of the issues there which I hope one day to resolve by finding someone who loves reading my stories, and is capable of correcting my quick typing spelling errors, or in some cases my word perfect corrections which are the wrong word altogether.

Now, Chapter length. If you have read my other stories, you would know that I don't usually go to short chapter lengths at all. Tri-Blade Saga, has huge chapter lengths. As a matter of fact by chapter six there is 40k words in the story, and we have hardly even hit stride yet in the real plot of the story. 40k is considered the bench mark of novel length stories. So this is an attempt at something new for me. A different style if you will.

Some of my other readers, and a few friends who some times prof read but don't have the greatest of skills in it, have pointed out to me in the past that it take a little to long for me to pull the reader into the story. So in this story I am thrusting you the readers into an already happening story, but as the main characters are only just arriving, the length of which the trials have been active prior this hardly maters, yet.

I might or might now give more details of the study as time goes on in the story, but  that is really up to the way the story unfolds in my head.

I do accept your apology. If you have any constructive suggestions, you are more then welcome to send them to me privately. As there is an option for that on the comment page. Goes straight to my email, and if I don't agree with what you have to say, it will be address in a more private manner.

I want to thank you for your response as well Fenixreign. Thank you for you support, and I hope that as time goes on I will grow and become a much better author. Now onto writing some more, or even in this case editing tee hee. Chapter 2 is up by the way.

This story is looking good and it is building so it can move down any path. You know human testing does happen in real life so your story so far is in the realm of possibility. Not saying that you should stay in the real life, I think most people read to let their minds escape real life (just for a little while) LOL.

Anyway this is looking good and hope you keep it coming.

(posted from Chapter 2)

Wicked Storm i am glad that you are putting forth the effort to write a good story.  I enjoyed the first three chapters and would like to encourage you to write more on this story.  Yes there are stories out there that are a like but to be honest its like a painting no 2 painters are exactly alike.  Keep up the good work and hope to see more.  I most defiantly want to see what you have in mind for the sisters

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Bump Bump :-)

me too. cant wait for the author to write some more of this story..... oh shit thats me...

Four play for foreplay?

(posted from Chapter 3)

Road to climax for rode to climax? You really need to learn how to deal with homonyms!

(posted from Chapter 3)

kojak1818 wrote:

You really need to learn how to deal with homonyms and the difference between singular and plural!

(posted from Chapter 5)

And you really need to pay attention when the admin of a site tells you that your behavior is inappropriate.  I've already warned you once.

Eric Storm

Edits are caught up to chapter 5 now, with a bit of new content on chapter 5.

Will probably work on the outline for chapter 6 later today and have it up sometime next week. Keep an eye out guys.