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I love the idea for the story but trying to read with the bullet point conversation style I find jarring and keeps taking me out of the story.
Thanks for sharing.
(posted from Chapter One)
Thank you for the feedback. I was already aware of that. It does bother me too, so I will change the style to a different one from chapter 3 and on.