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#1 2017-11-08 00:59:34

Bridget
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Journey, The

The Journey

A young man’s journey into adulthood as he tries to figure out how his favourite teacher became his slave and companion.


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#2 2017-11-09 19:16:25

SkiesEnd
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Registered: 2015-10-14
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Re: Journey, The

I love the idea for the story but trying to read with the bullet point conversation style I find jarring and keeps taking me out of the story.

Thanks for sharing.

(posted from Chapter One)

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#3 2017-11-10 08:58:31

Marked One
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Registered: 2017-11-06
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Re: Journey, The

Thank you for the feedback. I was already aware of that. It does bother me too, so I will change the style to a different one from chapter 3 and on.

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#4 2017-12-07 22:16:12

earthskeeper
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Registered: 2017-12-07
Posts: 5

Re: Journey, The

I sure hope the story is finished or at least added to. Thanks

(posted from Chapter Two)

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