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#1 2016-04-25 16:48:11

Bridget
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Divine Succession

Divine Succession

When God retires, it's up to David Jones to take up the holy helm.


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#2 2016-04-27 08:29:40

SilentSadist
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Re: Divine Succession

I liked it. You chased your imagination and while there are things I easily bored of (major archetype cliches), you took the time to explore many variations and created enough diversity & stimulus to balance the story. Reread this work several times in the future and hone your ability to craft literary works, because once you have I'd definitely be down for reading a revised/improved version of this story line.

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