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#1 2009-06-22 00:56:29

Bridget
God
From: The Internet
Registered: 2006-09-09
Posts: 535
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[crazy] Mount Olympus

[crazy] Mount Olympus

This is my first story so i have left any sexual ventures out of of the first few chapters i intend to write until i know how you guys feel about the story lines i will submit a new chapter each week if i make it.

This story is about a teen who discovers he has unusual abilities and decides to put them to use but discovers that he was given these abilities for a reason and must rise to his calling.

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#2 2009-06-28 18:51:04

dev_null
Tipsy
Registered: 2009-06-16
Posts: 4

Re: [crazy] Mount Olympus

You should shorten you sentences a bit. And of cours write more! So far it sounds good, but it's a bit early to really tell.

(posted from Chapter 1 - In the Begining)

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#3 2009-06-30 15:28:54

crazy
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Registered: 2009-05-05
Posts: 9

Re: [crazy] Mount Olympus

dev_null wrote:

You should shorten you sentences a bit. And of cours write more! So far it sounds good, but it's a bit early to really tell.

Thanks for the advice 3dbig_smile

I will take it into account when writing the next chapter.

also don't expect too much 3dsmile lol this is probably only the second story ive ever written 3dtongue

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#4 2009-08-20 04:18:43

gadget
Inebriated
From: Rancho Cucamonga, CA
Registered: 2007-07-19
Posts: 22

Re: [crazy] Mount Olympus

interesting start,let's see more! lot's of sex is not required,fun but not required

(posted from Chapter 1 - In the Begining)

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#5 2011-03-01 08:25:18

Elessar
Wasted
Registered: 2009-10-28
Posts: 245

Re: [crazy] Mount Olympus

I guess you just got bored of it or something. Cause you only have the first chapter posted... Either way, I read it and enjoyed it. Only see a few things to touch up on.

1) Punctuation
2) Much longer chapters
3) Little more detail in the events, and not so quick with them.

(posted from the Item Information Page)

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#6 2012-05-30 23:33:16

crazy
Tipsy
Registered: 2009-05-05
Posts: 9

Re: [crazy] Mount Olympus

Ill admit that I have a terrible memory and kinda forgot id even posted that chapter up here 3dneutral
Ill also admit I scrapped that story for another idea and never really picked it up again but found the site again a week or so back and caught up on some reading while I was on holiday ill see if I cans stir up some inspiration and get that story finished I had some good ideas for it at least lmao xD

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