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#1 2008-03-12 23:55:20

Bridget
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My Girls

My Girls Chapter 1

This is an account of a Dad, Mom and twin young teenage cheerleaders girls and their friends. There is tasteful sexual content and descriptions, but the emphasis is on story development and the lives of 2 girls and their family. If you like good stories with erotic content but graphic stroke sex is not the primary reason for reading, try this one.


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#2 2008-03-14 19:38:51

Weirdones
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Registered: 2008-02-19
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Re: My Girls

Nice to see you here!
Started reading your stories at a different place but they suddenly stopped.
Will be looking forward to reading this again!

(posted from the Item Information Page)

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#3 2008-03-15 00:39:59

unknown1000u2
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Re: My Girls

Glad you found them again.  There are 2 sites I started posting book one on but never finished posting it there.  Hope you enjoy them.

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#4 2008-05-17 01:49:33

unknown1000u2
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Re: My Girls

As some of you who have read my stories on other sites may know, there is an important character in My Girls Book two named Cire.  He is a cat, a Bengal to be exact.  His character was copied after my cat, also a Bengal.

The real Cire died Monday, 5/12/08.  He was eighteen years old, and had lived a long, happy life.  He finally succumbed to old age and kidney failure.  I knew the end was coming for several months, so I was not surprised.  That doesn't mean it was easy when it occured.

I still am surprised when I come home or get out of bed in the middle of the night and am not greeted by him.  After eighteen years, that is as it should be.   I will get used to it eventually.  He is in a lot less pain; it would be selfish of me to wish he were still here when he was suffering.

Unknown1000u2

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#5 2008-06-20 00:38:17

drestnar
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Re: My Girls

Hey, your writing is superb. You have everything in one novel, suspense, thriller, mystery and the loss of main characters. These make a novel beleivable and entertaing as all hell to read. I have read alot of novels in the pub, yet can say that I am on the edge of my seat. This does not happen often as that most writers use the same plot lines. Congrats on a well written and thought out story. Keep it up!!!!!

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#6 2008-06-23 07:59:17

drestnar
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Re: My Girls

I am cracking up man. This is some hilarious shit. I have tears in my eyes. Holy crap....

(posted from Chapter 18)

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#7 2008-09-17 18:00:22

LeoSolaris
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Re: My Girls

Awesome story! I really enjoyed it. It will be interesting to see where the last few chapters takes us.

P.S. I rather like the balance between sexual writing and storyline.

(posted from Chapter 20)


“Writing a book is an adventure. To begin with, it is a toy and an amusement; then it becomes a mistress, and then it becomes a master, and then a tyrant. The last phase is that just as you are about to be reconciled to your servitude, you kill the monster, and fling him out to the public.”
Winston Churchill

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#8 2008-11-27 04:03:13

unknown1000u2
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Re: My Girls

Ok, I've changed my mind.  I'm just going to post the rest of book 1 here without waiting to re-edit it.  It's taking too long (my fault, not the editor).  I will repost each chapter as I re-edit it.  That way, I can get book 1 on here and then get going on book 2 and 3 here.  I will likely finish posting book 1 Thanksgiving week.  Just keep in mind that I am eventually cleaning up Book 1.

Last edited by unknown1000u2 (2008-11-30 03:19:01)

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#9 2008-12-11 06:53:14

kizzy
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Re: My Girls

I'm glad i found this site. I've read the entire first book on another website and can't wait until the rest is posted.. Hopefully you haven't left this site to another because it took a while to find this one..lol

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#10 2008-12-14 16:33:17

unknown1000u2
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Re: My Girls

Ok, I'm finally getting around to posting the resat of My Girls as I promised to do over Thanksgiving weekend.  Just keep in mind that everything beyond chapter 22 has not had the re-editing that is being worked on.  I will repost those chapters as they are done and announce them here.   Just be kind... this was my first story I wrote, so it desperately needs the re-editing, at least in my opinion.  The re-editing will not change the content or the story... I have added a few sentences here and there, but nothing significant.  It just changes sentence structure, wording, spelling, etc. 

Enjoy.  After I finish posting MG's, I will start posting MG 2.  That and MG 3 have already been edited.

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#11 2009-02-10 01:35:01

edvardlavea
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Posts: 17

Re: My Girls

I am just starting chapter 9 and i am fully engrossed in the story. The sex is very well written, but the character development is extraordinary. I hope you enjoy your time at the pub and continue to write gotta get back to the story I want to know what happens next.....

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The only limit to our realization of tomorrow will be our doubts of today - Franklin D. Roosevelt

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#12 2009-02-11 05:02:55

edvardlavea
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Re: My Girls

WOW! Awesome book i am about to start the next. Thank you!

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The only limit to our realization of tomorrow will be our doubts of today - Franklin D. Roosevelt

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#13 2009-02-16 00:44:31

edvardlavea
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Re: My Girls

I think that this story is an amazing achievement of erotic literature. I would recommend this story to anyone interested in the genre. Thank you for posting it. I can't wait to read the next book.


The only limit to our realization of tomorrow will be our doubts of today - Franklin D. Roosevelt

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#14 2009-08-29 10:21:05

SnakeEater
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Re: My Girls

1/3 of the way through & I HAD to add this to my favorites, GREAT story so far.

(posted from Chapter 10)

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#15 2009-08-29 18:52:58

SnakeEater
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Re: My Girls

I will tell the author one thing, If you are writing fiction professionally PLEASE let me what name to look for & I will buy whatever you are writing!

(posted from Chapter 33)

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#16 2009-12-12 20:30:11

Bd.Carlo
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Registered: 2009-11-06
Posts: 62

Re: My Girls

very nice story, well written, and I thought that '24' was an absolutely brilliant name for a privet, high end, paramilitary organization.

(posted from Chapter 33)


"Genius may have its limitations, but stupidity is not thus handicapped."  Elbert Hubbard
"A bookstore is one of the only pieces of evidence we have that people are still thinking." Jerry Seinfeld

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#17 2010-01-10 09:56:11

edvardlavea
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Re: My Girls

SnakeEater wrote:

I will tell the author one thing, If you are writing fiction professionally PLEASE let me what name to look for & I will buy whatever you are writing!

(posted from Chapter 33)

I often wonder about that. The quality of of the work posted here... it is hard for me to believe that none of my favorite contributes here, are not aslo published authors.


The only limit to our realization of tomorrow will be our doubts of today - Franklin D. Roosevelt

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#18 2010-10-06 00:23:55

Nadez
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Registered: 2009-06-06
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Re: My Girls

Just started reading, Normally I just read Eric's stuff but I must say after just a few chapters I got very engrossed in your story quite brilliant work. Im curious if your still around? Very good writing one way or another. I plan on finishing this book and moving on to the others promptly

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#19 2010-10-06 01:10:49

unknown1000u2
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Re: My Girls

Yep, still around.  Working on the epilogue of book 3 now.    Glad you like it.  Enjoy the rest of the three books.

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#20 2010-10-06 03:48:18

Nadez
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Re: My Girls

Thank you 3dsmile I'll post as I finish each book to give you my thoughts, That is if your interested

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#21 2010-10-06 03:52:18

unknown1000u2
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Re: My Girls

always interested in feedback.

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#22 2011-01-10 08:03:18

StoryJunkie
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Re: My Girls

I just finished the first book, I came here for a story from Eric, but then I decided to see what the other writers brought to the table. I was floored by this story, I couldn't wait to get through each chapter. I'm getting the second one now to read and can't wait to see what changes come.

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#23 2011-01-12 03:12:51

Caliburn
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Registered: 2010-08-28
Posts: 7

Re: My Girls

The 2nd book is rough but great. The 3rd ... isn't finished yet. Great stories though.

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#24 2012-07-09 05:12:12

shrotycg
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Registered: 2011-02-24
Posts: 6

Re: My Girls

Anyone know what LOP stands for. It is used twice in the story.

I felt the love of LOP in my mind, wishing she had had that growing up.

This had worked before with LOP; I hoped it would work now or I was going to be forced to slap her to calm her down.

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#25 2012-07-09 07:38:55

lordalpha
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From: North Carolina
Registered: 2007-01-26
Posts: 139

Re: My Girls

LOP is the acronym for Little Orange Person.

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