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#1 2017-10-31 18:46:31

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Contribution, The

The Contribution

Eric Stein is drawn into a world he would rather avoid entirely. He just happens to be a double for someone 'they' need. He'd rather be at the library.

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#2 2017-11-05 23:28:41

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I quite liked it. I hope you don't change too much. I especially liked Eric's attitude. It seemed flippant yet likable. Keep up the good work.

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#3 2017-11-09 16:53:58

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ljackson318 wrote:

I quite liked it. I hope you don't change too much. I especially liked Eric's attitude. It seemed flippant yet likable. Keep up the good work.

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I went through it and was horrified I'd already posted it. I clearly needed to do an edit for epic mistakes in it, expansion and better exposition, and ... well. It put me off my usual method of writing which is stream of consciousness. Clearly the fingers had omitted common sense as I blathered through.

I am working on it. First person is different from my usual style of writing. Third person works so much better for me.


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#4 2017-11-16 21:26:45

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Re: Contribution, The

This is marked "inactive" are we going to see more, or was this a one shot update?

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#5 2017-11-17 06:45:08

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Reread it. Still a good read. Keep up the good work. Look forward to reading more of this.

(posted from Chapter One)

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#6 2017-11-18 03:43:04

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Tuzzdeny wrote:

This is marked "inactive" are we going to see more, or was this a one shot update?

This was my re-write of the first chapter. I wasn't sure I was going to get to it soon because, life. I'm 2k words into chapter two and having to redo some of the outline. I've done first person before but it's been so long I feel like an idiot trying to do it now. Used to be words would just spit themselves onto the page. Maybe I'm getting old.


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