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#1 2017-07-14 12:13:36

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Touch of Green, A

A Touch of Green

Ben is gifted a unique influence to affect the women in his life or he encounters. He starts down the path of exploration. His interest is piqued. He clearly has his own ideas of what he wants though.

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#2 2017-07-15 00:51:04

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Re: Touch of Green, A

Your creative use of descriptors is very poetic, it really gives a feel for the characters admiration of the individual you start out describing at the onset of your story. You put in a good balance of normal writing and poetic. It’s a nice change to some of what I read very often.

The multiple Character point of views is a nice shift, and it’s a good way to giving us the readers a feel for what the other characters are feeling lol. Sorry for writing the word characters so many times, lol. I have enjoyed what you have written so far, and am looking forward to more of your work. The warmth and gentleness of your eroticism in the story is also very interesting.

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In the dark your lips taste like sweet nectar, and in the line they tease me endlessly.

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#3 2017-07-19 01:10:41

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Re: Touch of Green, A

A very nice and refreshing read, I can't wait to see what you end up doing with the characters.

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#4 2017-08-03 17:49:32

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Re: Touch of Green, A

I'm in something like my third or fourth re-write of the second chapter. The side characters somehow seem to be drawing me away from the intended purpose, so it is not coming out smoothly and may be delayed a bit.


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#5 2017-08-03 18:52:40

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Re: Touch of Green, A

Perhaps your characters are trying to tell you something.  Maybe there's a story you'd rather be telling than the one you're intending.

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#6 2017-08-03 22:49:29

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Re: Touch of Green, A

I think it more likely they're trying to rush the story to conclusion actually. Frustrating, ya know.


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#7 2017-09-01 14:00:49

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Re: Touch of Green, A

yes!! thank you. it is so hard to find good D/s that is not just s/M. keep up the good work.

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#8 2017-09-26 22:09:22

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Very much enjoy the start of this story and where it appears to be headed. Definitely enjoy your writing style. I typically measure the success of a story by whether I would read it without the sex scenes. This is definitely a story that would stand tall using that criteria. I look forward to reading your next installments.

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#9 2017-10-02 19:37:05

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Re: Touch of Green, A

I really hate my spelling errors and pre-post editing flubs. In a big way. It is good to know some of you are enjoying the story. It should only have a few more chapters to completion.


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#10 2017-10-02 20:07:12

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Re: Touch of Green, A

I'm really enjoying the story.

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#11 2017-10-09 02:13:19

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Re: Touch of Green, A

Also am enjoying the story, so thank you for sharing it with us.

Found what I think is a mixed reference in “Millenium . My wife and I have been going to popular operas over the last few years. Rossini did The Barber of Seville (very fun opera), then Mozart carried the characters over to The Marriage of Figaro (Le Nozze di Figaro).

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#12 2017-10-09 04:00:41

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GornBCS wrote:

Also am enjoying the story, so thank you for sharing it with us.

Found what I think is a mixed reference in “Millenium� . My wife and I have been going to popular operas over the last few years. Rossini did The Barber of Seville (very fun opera), then Mozart carried the characters over to The Marriage of Figaro (Le Nozze di Figaro).

it's a flub. i often screw up with music & lyrics & titles & artists & composers & even periods. mistakes R us. sorry.


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#13 2017-10-09 09:51:37

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Re: Touch of Green, A

No trouble! Figaro was the main character in the Barber of Seville, so I can understand the confusion.

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#14 2017-10-13 15:58:30

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Re: Touch of Green, A

write. re-write. write again.

Last edited by Blackie (2017-10-19 00:17:47)


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