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I agree it has to fit the story, that is a given. But as someone who reads a lot and quite likes your way of writing i hope that you came up with something better than Nick using his powers on his Dad to make him leave the family or just turn him into his "slave" and claims his mother and sister as his. If there is a better reason for this than just because he can do it, it could be good. But i hope you got a better solution in mind.
On the other hand i will read every chapter anyway.
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I have already made clear that Nick doesn't want to use his power on his family.
Eric Storm
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"Doesn´t want to" and "is not going to" or "is forced to", are different things.
For arguments sake he could have sex with his mom and his father catched them, now Nick could be forced to use his powers. And that is a common trope. Or his father could discover his factory or his other relationships and gives him shit about it and trys to force Nick to give everything up, and now Nick has to use his powers. At this point i don´t know where you are going with the story and i cant wait to find out how you are gona solve this. I know how i would do it, but i am not the one writing the story.
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You forget that Nick has stuff he can hold over his father. His father depends on a squeaky-clean public reputation that he cannot live up to at home. Were Nick to reveal that - and he would have backup from at least Teresa if no one else - his father's entire life would come crumbling down.
Therefore, it is not necessarily the case that Nick would be forced to use mind control. A simple stalemate of blackmailing back and forth might be sufficient.
Of course, mind control is easier. I'm just saying it's not the only way Nick has to deal with the situations that might arise with his father.
Eric Storm
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Loved the chapter. So many interesting scenes; how Nick interacted with his family after the vandalism, both FBI ones and I especially enjoyed the couple with Linda as well as both sex scenes. Looking forward to seeing what Nick and SALT have to go up against.
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Loved the chapter Eric.
(posted from Chapter 10)
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The B. in Benoit B. Mandelbrot, stands for Benoit B. Mandelbrot.
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The guy's just being pretentious. The B stands for Bob.
Eric Storm
PS: Yes, I got the joke. How come no funny remarks about Sierpinski?
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Things with SALT sure seems to be building up steam very quickly. Nearly spit my drink out reading the banter with Pat’s son on thanksgiving. Looking forward to next chapter.
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I take no responsibility for water-damaged electronics.
Eric Storm
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That comment about not knowing what the fiscal year is, is way too specific to not be about an actual person.
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Hyproxy wrote:
That comment about not knowing what the fiscal year is, is way too specific to not be about an actual person.
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Actually that comment applys to many of my clueless relatives. Recall once in the early 70s had a cousin tell me "My taxes pay your salary" I was active Navy at that time. replied my Taxes also pay my salary. Only one of my relatives in that group knew the Military paid taxes when not in a combat zone
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I am, seriously, enjoying this story and wait hopefully for more of it.
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ChiefRock wrote:
the Military paid taxes when not in a combat zone
I know this is true, but it has never made any sense to me. You got your money from the federal government, only to have them tax that money.... well, if they didn't want you to have all of it, why'd they give you so much in the first place??? Seems like we could save some bureaucracy by just reducing government worker pay by the amount they would be taxed, and make them tax-exempt.
But, you know, that would be efficient. Government wouldn't want to do something efficient...
Eric Storm
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Just read ch. 6 another great chapter
nicks dad is a HUGE dick and his little brother needs to pull his tongue from his dad ass I'm interested in seeing how Nick's mum grows in the story. Another great one
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Eric just to let you know that this is a great story so far and hope not to wait to soon for more chapters. It is also true that all your stories are great and keep coming back to reread
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Eric Storm wrote:
Seems like we could save some bureaucracy by just reducing government worker pay by the amount they would be taxed, and make them tax-exempt.
Eric Storm
If you don't pay tax you can't set of something against your tax liability. so the goverment lose some leverege to nuge you in a direction.
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sermona wrote:
Eric Storm wrote:
Seems like we could save some bureaucracy by just reducing government worker pay by the amount they would be taxed, and make them tax-exempt.
Eric StormIf you don't pay tax you can't set of something against your tax liability. so the goverment lose some leverege to nuge you in a direction.
Also, the bureaucracy is already in place for income taxes, social security taxes (supposedly paying for retirement benefits for all workers) and Medicare taxes (supporting THAT universal insurance policy), so there would not only be no bureaucracy cutback, there would be either a removal of benefits or ADDITIONAL bureaucracy to handle the undocumented benefits.
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hope to see more
(posted from Chapter 12)
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Me too. Don't you hate it when these fuckin' authors just stop in the middle of a story for no reason? Stupid bastards.
Eric Storm
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A new chapter! Huzzah!
Great chapter Eric!
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I thoroughly enjoyed the chapter. Can’t wait to see what happen with the new living situation.
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The only thing I dislike about this chapter… is how fast it took to read it. It was a great chapter, I was expecting the end, or at least something similar but it was still a very good chapter. Couple spots I read to fast and had to go back and reread but that’s my fault… well yours to for writing it so well.
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it was nice to see a conclusion to the build up of previous chapters with the family, but something tells me that there is still one final fight to come. Also it seems that Ayumi is starting to use to her surroundings and she seems not as depressed or as much being afraid of things. So once again a very nice chapter and will look forward to reading more
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Elessar wrote:
The only thing I dislike about this chapter… is how fast it took to read it. It was a great chapter, I was expecting the end, or at least something similar but it was still a very good chapter. Couple spots I read to fast and had to go back and reread but that’s my fault… well yours to for writing it so well.
It's not my fault if you have forgotten how to slow down and just enjoy yourself, instead of rushing through everything in life.
Eric Storm
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