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BiStander, your collection of work is quite remarkable.  I recently discovered your compositions in another forum.  As a less talented writer myself , I wish to reach out to you and state you have been blessed with a gift.  It is remarkable your story line mirrors my real life experience.  We never had sex with our parents but we sure did with brother and sister and then my sisters children with her and with each other and me.  Do not get discouraged. You body of work under the title POTENTIAL is worthy of publication in the main stream under forbidden erotica. Besos Anganell Brigette

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Taking a look at your latest chapter, my suggestion would be that the spacing between lines needs to be increased slightly.  Right now, it all starts to run together into one massive block.

This is, of course, just my opinion, and as I have bad eyesight, my impression may be skewed.

Eric Storm

Ah, neolyn, you ask some very good questions, and I'm glad you did because I am very stressed about whether or not I'll remember to tie up all these ends. I'm happy to hear what you are thinking.

I will keep a copy of your questions and welcome anyone else to ask.

Because you should already know, I will answer this, Candy's mother became a drunk after her husband died in the car crash with Sandra, not that she was a great mother before that. Among other things, she was getting fucked by Bobby while everyone else slept. We must assume her husband was there because Candy thought it was her father, at first. Bobby stayed on to try and help her recover, but she never did. You'll see that in a conversation between Candy and Sally where Candy expressed her guilty feelings about leaving her mother. Can't remember which chapter that's in.

You should also know that Candy reached out to Darlene, but the redhead wasn't sure she believed it was really her aunt.

I'll have to look back and see where, but I'm pretty sure it was covered that Sally was the first babysitter before Candy. If not, shame on me.

As far as #7, what would you do if you came home and found that your system for checking up on your cheating wife was missing or blank?

Eric, thank you for the heads up. I'll try 1.5 line spacing. I have single now.

bistander wrote:

Ah, neolyn, you ask some very good questions, and I'm glad you did because I am very stressed about whether or not I'll remember to tie up all these ends. I'm happy to hear what you are thinking.

I will keep a copy of your questions and welcome anyone else to ask.

Because you should already know, I will answer this, Candy's mother became a drunk after her husband died in the car crash with Sandra, not that she was a great mother before that. Among other things, she was getting fucked by Bobby while everyone else slept. We must assume her husband was there because Candy thought it was her father, at first. Bobby stayed on to try and help her recover, but she never did. You'll see that in a conversation between Candy and Sally where Candy expressed her guilty feelings about leaving her mother. Can't remember which chapter that's in.

You should also know that Candy reached out to Darlene, but the redhead wasn't sure she believed it was really her aunt.

I'll have to look back and see where, but I'm pretty sure it was covered that Sally was the first babysitter before Candy. If not, shame on me.

As far as #7, what would you do if you came home and found that your system for checking up on your cheating wife was missing or blank?

Eric, thank you for the heads up. I'll try 1.5 line spacing. I have single now.

Wait, it was Candy's Father in the car and not Sandra's ?

I forgot that Sally was the sitter before Candy.

Would it be wrong of me to think that Darlene's father is in reality John making her and Evan half-siblings ? With Gloria being her half-sister AND cousin ?

John is a monster yet I can't believe that  Sally and Candy's father would not catch on that despite being underage they BOTH got pregnant one after another  while each one was a sitter.

Did Sandra never said anything because just like Candy she was an abused wife ?

Now I wonder if the car accident was really a car accident... It's really too convenient for John.


So Sally and candy's mother was having sex with Bobby BEFORE their father died and THEN she began drinking because of his death. That's doesn't make sense to me. Did his death make her heartbroken ? I find it hard to belive since she was clearly cheating on him with their son.

#7 There are many ways, Power outage ? Copy & past and ealier day? but I guess that since Candy's doesn't seem very knowledgable about technology she doesn't know.


Why did Candy did not continue having contact with Darlene? Surely she'd have know that just a " Hello I'm your aunt " would not be enough.

So Candy is in the know that Evan is crazy in love with Darlene and she doesn't help him to score by talking a lot with Darlene ? Bad Candy ! >

I need to read everything again because some more things bother me And I'm sure the anwsers I'm looking for were already given. Like Cindy is from whose side of the family, John or Sandra ?

I still wonder about Candy and and Evan. I mean from what we know Candy is in love with him, she can't resist him after all, yet she's with Cindy ...

I do Hope that Cindy and Even share more than a kiss, sooner or later.

I'm wondering, what age is Gloria ?  13 or so right ? I'd be honest her young age is bothering me a lot, I'm not really into this kind of thing but I do not mind teenager having sex together even if one is 13 and the other 19 (as long as both are willing, are underage or barely of age).

neolyn, Yes, you really better reread it because you missed some important facts. I take responsibility for that if you have been reading it a long time and have had to wait between chapters. Honestly, I have forgotten stuff. That's why I like it when people ask questions or make comments about things they are wondering about.

I won't give anything away, but I'll tell you that yes, Candy's father. That comes out in one of her internal monologs. The stuff about what happened with the mother comes out during one of Candy and Sally's conversations.
It was also revealed that Bobby is Gloria's father.
In an early chapter Candy is thinking about a thunderstorm. She sees what she thinks is happening. Later on, she reveals that it was actually Bobby.

John's computer is locked to Candy and unless the power has been out for over a week then the missing footage cannot be explained. Even if Candy was tech enough to get into it, would she know how to go through a week of recordings and get rid of only what John can't see? I doubt it. Think about how many times Evan left. He's grounded, and one night he stayed at Jason after the races. Cindy has been there twice, but Candy only knows about the one time. We have no idea what else might have been recorded. Remember what happened to Candy when she stood up for Evan? Can you imagine what might happen if Candy fucks with his computer?

John's sister is Julia, so Cindy would be from that side of the family.

Gloria is young. Deana was young too when John started fucking with her. That's why we hate him so much. Evan is 16, and I haven't done the math lately, but Gloria should be 13. I can't remember how old I said Candy is, but she was pregnant at 13, I think. So baby at 14, + 13 that makes her 27, yeah, that works.
I hope you caught on to the fact that both Deana and Gloria want to lose their virginity for the same reason. That's the reason they are in a hurry.

I discovered potential about1 or 2 years ago a bit more maybe.Normal that I forgot some stuff.

"John's sister is Julia, so Cindy would be from that side of the family."

But Deana looks like her mother and Evan find Cindy looking like Deana. How come Cindy is from John's side then ?

"Gloria is young. Deana was young too when John started fucking with her."

You wrote Deana but meant Candy I guess ?


Ok I knew John was after Deana but I don't remember him being after Gloria too. I may have miss that or it was too subtle for me.(english is not my first language after all)


About the video... yeah Candy is in deep shit! Evan too. But except beat them up what can he do? He can throw out Candy and Gloria but they would live with Sally. Heck Candy seems to move out an go to Sally.

I thought Evan and Deana were older than that, like 18 and in their last year in highschool.

Wait Becky is one year younger than Evan, meaning she's fifteen, how come she's in Highschool ? Did she skip a grade ?

I just think they are really mature for their age, especially Gloria.

Ok I read it again :

"Deana was young too when John started fucking with her." I understood the "with" in a way meaning John was actually having sex with her. since Evan took her virginity that didn't fit .

I started reading again and there are lot of things that I forgot, didn't pay attention too or didn't understand.

Now I have even more questions about John's side of the family and Sandra.

I think I'll really makes notes. I'm sure some of my questions could be answered my matching infos.

Doesn't look forward to read again the bestiality scenes though. I love Darlene's character, but that part of her is not for me.(I tend to skip them, sorry : / )


My biggest question at the moment is :

Did you already planed all the story or go with the flow ? I mean, in ealier chapters we learn that Candy is not on the pill anymore(neither is Jayda nor Becky) and it's never mentioned again.

So are there irrelevant informations that would make sense latter and seems irrelevant on purpose or are just truly irrelevant and you changed some things along the way because it didn't fit what you are writting?

Since the story is based on real people or'actual event, did you somehow put yourself in it?

I glad to know that you planed everything. I read countless work which started great and turned to shit because the author clearly didn't planed beyond a certain point, and everytime it makes me mad .

I finally got to a... scene with darlene and jason and .... brutus. I remembered the part with jason but not with brutus.

I just hope there is a good ending or at least a not too bitter sweet ending.(I can take almost anything so long that John gets what he deserves and that Darlene doesn't end up with Jason).

Still waiting for evan to be cindy, cindy and candy, darlene and jason's mom.

I don't count Gloria because it' pretty sure she's the next onthe list xD

Now that I know that evan is not 16 i'm okay with the both of them together .

In my country 15 and 6 month is the age it's legal for teenager to have sex no matter how older is the partner. That's why I'm not bothered by evan and older women.

Last edited by neolyn (2019-01-15 00:27:53)

TabooIsGoodForYou wrote:

I’m even debating re reading it again to pass time!

That might be a good idea as I have dropped so many hints over such a long period of time. I didn't realize this was going to turn into a frickin' novel. Normally, something this long and complicated is read in a short period, so you are more likely to remember what happened in chapter 5 that has an effect in chapter 20. Jeez, I'm amazed that ya'll have put up with me.
It surprises me when someone tells me they just found the story recently and have read all 27 chapters in days. The story wasn't designed for that. If a chapter ends with sex, and the next one starts with sex, in my mind weeks and sometimes months have passed, yet for the reader, it's only been a few minutes. I picture them rolling their eyes wondering why there is so much sex.

Anyway, thank you for reaching out. I assume you were reading it on nifty if you had to look for a way to give feedback? It had been my understanding when I first posted there that my email address was to be included at the top of the post. I found out it wasn't. I'm so glad I found Wolfpub. Here I don't have to get involved with an admin to post a story, I actually have user id(which Nifty won't give me), and I can repost if errors need to be fixed. Now, if I could just get the readers to tell me where the errors are.
There are many good authors on this site who write great stories, well, unlike the rubbish on many of the other erotica sites.

Chapter 28 is being worked on. Going forward I'll try and do more recapping to help those who read chapter 1 three years ago.

TabooIsGoodForYou wrote:

Heck I feel like these characters are my friends anyway lol

I can't imagine there is a better compliment you could have given me. Thank you.

Feel free to start a dialog with me through the email link here, and you can throw ideas and questions at me. Who knows you might remind me of things I have forgotten. I spent my writing time the last two days reviewing chapters, so I make sure I get the time-line correct and don't say something that can't happen, which I was going to do. I promise, I read too slow to go back through the whole 320,000 words.

I started my notes, I can send them to you once I'm done, if that can help you. Though it will take a while. At least a week to a month for all chapters currently available

Last edited by neolyn (2019-01-22 17:30:12)

I was more taking notes on the characters, Who is who, and how/what they are. Not so much the past events since you refer to them often enough.

Don't rush it....Better to have something up to you normal standard and quality then something rushed and not quite as good as it could be...