The Woodward Academy, Year 8

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2020-May-6 @ 12:27 PM
Elessar
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Well... Who is to say that he even has the chance to finish it? Could be a catastrophic issue that prevents him from finishing it and causes him to go to the dark side.


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2020-May-6 @ 12:32 PM
darthel0101
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Maverick7508 wrote:

Yes I was thinking airbender for that, and as for what I meant darthel it would be combining the elemandy from the scrolls, if real, and the shield to fend off the weres. I could see some potent combinations if he completes the shield and there is anything to the legends of the scrolls. Even if it never happens, the mental image is hilarious.

Ahh.
My memory of Aang using the full power of the Avatar prior to completing his training with scar-face (can't remember his name right now) is him becoming lost in that power and then coming out of its use drained, confused, etc.

Eric,
I don't really expect the Aegis to prevent David's descent into darkness, but if he completes his journey into darkness before completing the Aegis, he is not likely to receive the items needed for it. On the other hand, if he overcomes his dark side, then it might be possible for him to become more active in the war without being overcome by rage.
I fully expect David to go the full journey to that final choice-point and I can only hope that your plan is to divert him at the last moment from taking the dark path. You are the writer, though, and you have already stated that you have a plan, so I am sitting back and enjoying your story as you tell it.


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2020-May-7 @ 6:33 PM
edjueinnest
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good work love the story

(posted from Chapter 1: June)


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2020-May-8 @ 5:47 AM
thehilz
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While fighting the fire lord as the end of the series when Aang was in full avatar mode and about to kill the fire lord which would have been against his monk beliefs he all of a sudden regained control of himself and found another way to defeat his enemy(thanks to being given information from a ancient source just before the battle). I do hope that something similar happens with David in that right as he is about to fully embrace his dark side to win the battle he is able to find another way to overcome his enemies.


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2020-May-8 @ 8:50 AM
Eric Storm
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Without wanting to reveal anything outright, let me pose a question for consideration:

When has David's dark side actually gotten out of control during combat?

Eric Storm


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2020-May-8 @ 9:38 AM
thehilz
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Only time I can think of is after he finds Lise has been killed and body is being eaten.


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2020-May-8 @ 10:01 AM
Eric Storm
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I knew you were going to mention that, and that was not during combat.  David was not fighting anyone at that point... not even the were.  The were had been disabled before David began his...er... "lesson".  And he hadn't been engaged with other weres immediately prior to this.  ("Immediately" here means seconds, not minutes)  In fact, in this scene, David's combat behavior is perfectly normal.

David's dark side was brought on by something else.

Eric Storm


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2020-May-8 @ 10:11 AM
thehilz
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I would argue that it was still a combat situation. David might not have been in active combat at the time but the possibility of him having to fight still existed. Also he went on to do the same to another 35 or so weres. I kinda doubt that he didn’t have to fight any of them before they began his lesson.  Although if you say he didn’t then I’ll have to accept that he didn’t since you as the author have ultimate say


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2020-May-8 @ 1:20 PM
Eric Storm
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I said he didn't in the few minutes before he arrived at the site of Lise's death.  They DID take on a few werewolves, to rescue some human victims.  He then stopped fighting.  He gave orders to Giendia and Vivian to continue saving humans, and then he went to find Lise.  He actually actively avoided combat, in order to save time.  He did so by becoming completely invisible.

The point is, combat had nothing to do with what happened to that werewolf.  It wasn't the act of facing those werewolves that caused David's darkness to emerge at that time.  It was caused by something else entirely.  What I'm saying is, if David had come upon that scene completely separate from the chaos that was going on around them that day... he would have acted exactly the same.

What happened afterward could, arguably, be called revenge rather than combat.  Or you could call it combat, but it doesn't matter, because David's slip into darkness had already occurred, so was obviously not caused by it.

Eric Storm


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2020-May-8 @ 3:12 PM
thehilz
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Ok I see what you mean. You were asking more for the causation than the situation surrounding David’s slip into his dark side.


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2020-May-8 @ 10:24 PM
Eric Storm
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Right, I was relating it to the situation you were mentioning with Aang, where his being out of control was directly caused by the fact that he was in the middle of a battle, rather than the battle simply being coincidental.

Eric Storm


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2020-Jun-1 @ 10:46 AM
ITRIXSTERI
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Thankyou for the new chapter gives me something to read while theres riots going on outside my house stay safe and hope all goes well. I know you were friends with mangusfang do you know what happen to him is he alright.

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2020-Jun-1 @ 10:48 AM
Eric Storm
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While I never had any problems with Magusfang, I don't think you could call us friends.  I don't know what's happened to him.  I've emailed him a couple times over the years without result.

Eric Storm


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2020-Jun-1 @ 11:00 AM
ITRIXSTERI
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Thanks for the information an the early birthday present i turn big 30 on the 9th have a good night and be safe.

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2020-Jun-1 @ 11:50 AM
darthel0101
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MaguSfang was also posting in another location where there was more interaction between him and his readers.
I know that he and his wife & mistress pretty much dropped out (IIRC, somewhere on the lower coastline) after he had an issue with some training exercise and NOBODY'S heard from any of them since.


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2020-Jun-1 @ 11:55 AM
Elessar
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Over all I have to say the chapter was well paced and thought out. I felt the pain when they reunited and completely understand Joes logic. Personally I feel I would do the same thing.
I love the name of the lake, still think my idea was better. Of course that is because it is my idea. I do like how you came up with the name though.
I was personally hoping to have some more news about the school but the shield quest is happily underway.

(posted from Chapter 8: January)


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2020-Jun-1 @ 1:32 PM
bigfoot
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Yet another good chapter. As sad as I was with David's apology to Cupcake in December, that is how I felt as David and Joe reunited. The unspoken knowledge that David slept with Zyla must have truly hurt Joe though he had enough humanity left to NOT reveal he knew the truth (or how he really felt about it). If we never hear from Joe again, the last scene between him, Zyla and David is a tribute to his ability to always be a curmudgeon.

Also, well done on showing how David is slipping. He is clearly losing his ability to tolerate fools, not a thing you want in the military. At some point, being an asshole trumps being right (in real life anyway) and it seems David doesn't have far to go to get there. In the past, he would have immediately known to used the finder to locate the GPS anchor. His anger is starting to lessen his ability to be effective at his job.


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2020-Jun-1 @ 3:33 PM
Eric Storm
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bigfoot wrote:

The unspoken knowledge that David slept with Zyla must have truly hurt Joe though he had enough humanity left to reveal he knew the truth (or how he really felt about it).

I don't understand what you're trying to say here.  Could you reword, please?

In the past, he would have immediately known to used the finder to locate the GPS anchor. His anger is starting to lessen his ability to be effective at his job.

Two things:  First, David hadn't even bothered to concern himself with "problem resolution" yet.  He was still in "discipline" mode.  Disciplining the officer (by yelling at him) would be expected, and appropriate.  The vigax made a major mistake.  The only real issue is that David allowed his anger to leak over onto others, which is where his lack of control comes in.

Second, under no circumstances would David have remembered to use the Finder before Jolene did.  It sits on Jolene's desk, she uses it regularly.  Probably the only reason it took her as long as it did to use it was that David's appearance in the room distracted her.

And... you're right, being an asshole always seems to win out over being right.  Look at our politicians.  Assholes, almost all of them.  Right?  Almost never.  The truth is, David's behavior would only prevent him from getting promoted, it wouldn't hurt him otherwise unless he did something drastic, like kill somebody for real.  And David doesn't want to be promoted, so he has no incentive to rein in his behavior.

Eric Storm


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2020-Jun-1 @ 9:12 PM
bigfoot
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Yeah, I originally omitted the word 'NOT' and have corrected that mistake. To rephrase, it is my belief that Joe knew that David was trying to admit he slept with Zyla. Joe is anything but stupid and was very quick to disarm David, not allowing him to state the obvious. Consider the following:

"Look, Joe..." David said, rubbing his hand across the back of his neck.  "There was kind of an incident between Zyla and me.  We-" David stopped, because Joe raised his hand.

I believe at that moment, Joe realized what David was trying to tell him. He made sure David would continue to take care of Zyla and Grace and let the living take care of the living. Was it cold and distant? Sure, but that's the point. It's also heartbreaking (to us) for sure.

I'll also add from a philosophical standpoint, you really hit home by stating:

"I mean... everyone who dies ends up here.  Everyone.  King, peasant, good, bad, pretty, ugly, smart, stupid... we all end up in the same place, in the same condition, doing the same damned thing.  So what the fuck difference did it make whether we lived a good life, whether we made a contribution?"

I left his chapter with that thought rattling through my head. Thanks for that wink


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2020-Jun-2 @ 1:54 AM
Eric Storm
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I'll leave it up to the reader to decide if Joe knew at that particular point.  I will say that, when you pair this conversation with the one he had with Zyla, you can be fairly safe that he added 2 and 2 and came up with at least 3.99... 
smile

Eric Storm


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2020-Jun-2 @ 4:33 AM
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Okay , so.... report:

A bit disapointed with the chapter, it was mostly a succession of  military assholes and David somehow dealing with them.
It was intertaining but I would haved like to read something different at some point.
Which I did with the very last part of the chapter but that was not really relevant, I guess?

I mean to sum it up it was:
David came, said hello, asked for the shield, got told to go see the ice dragon and left...

I think you could have put it almost anywhere in the chapter and it would not have change a thing.
Maybe, it would have been better if the moment was longer and give a bit more info, not about the shield, but about the were-fox, or their culture, or something. you shut it down really quickly by a simple " Not our bussiness". That was a bit cheap.

By the way there is an error when David leave REv, here it is:

"For another hour or so," Rev said with a grin in his voice.  "

Rev is a female so shouldn't it be :" Rev said with a grin in HER voice ?

I don't know about any other mistakes but that one caught my eye.


Now what else to talk about but Joe.
What an ass. I mean okay he's dead, but doesn't he have friends and family there too ? So he doesn't have to be alone and bitter ?

If he doesn't like death so much, why didn't he go off himself for good in the belly of the beast that eat ghost ?
For saying that he miss and love Zyla so much, he couldn't make the effort to properly say goodbye to her?

It's not like they are separate forever though. Once she dies, death isn't between the two of them anymore...

To get back to the sucession of military assholes... was it here to introduce the David X Toni scene ? It's the only reason I see for the succession being there.
And why not go to Vivian or Glendia for stress relief ?

By the way, did you know that every time David get a blow job you're always using the same words when he comes?A touch of novelty would not hurt one bit wink

Was this chapter a break from the action/ main plot for the reader to get some room the breath a bit ?

The writting was good, as always, just the events being related not so much.

Not your greatest chapter, but I guess after the previous one which I think is one of the best of the entire Woodward saga, I'm a bit biased. That and I didn't get the joke about European and African Falconswift, and I HATE when I don't get it! >sad

Do keep writitng, because this work is really nice.

PS: Still waiting for some kind of threesome with the Hasterscant ladies (or any kind of threesome, it's been a while)

PPS: Still waiting for a David X Helen or a David X Endora (would really like to see if the ever so strict on the sheets Endora is as strict IN the sheets if you know what I mean : D).

PPPS: Can Banshees have sex ?

PPPPS: Will we ever see another protagonist like Rose? You know with nipple rings and a really, really kinky side ?


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2020-Jun-2 @ 6:14 AM
bigfoot
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Hey neolyn - dude, relax. Fine, you didn't ike the chapter but did you need to go into such detail. Say you didn't like it and get on with your day. Or simply thank Eric for his efforts and get on with your day.

To answer one riddle for you, the joke about European and African Falconswift comes from MONTY PYTHON AND THE HOLY GRAIL. It came out in 1975 If you haven't yet seen it, watch it. Then, in great detail, write to the surviving members of Monty Python and tell them specifically what you didn't like about the movie. They love when people do that.


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2020-Jun-2 @ 6:58 AM
neolyn
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I'm relax you know ?

I'm a bit disapointed with the chapter, that doesn't mean I didn't like it.
It's like what they say about blow jobs, even a bad blowjob is a good blow job.

I did have to go into such detail, what kind of critic would that be if I didn't ?
The critic is more on the negative side (a first for me about the Woodward saga), that's true and I'm not denying it.

But as far as I know ( and let's be honest that's not much) authors want an honest opinion about their work.
Sure they like comments praisint it (who doesn't ?) but feeling good about it aside, those kind of comment is not really helpful.

I create games, I want and need to see what people thinks about my work, not just " hey it's good/bad" I want to know the why behind it, that's what is really important so I can do better next time.

I think every single person who's really into making something share that feeling.
Yes sometimes it sucks, that people think negativly of what we put time and effort to make, but that's life.

Besides Eric is a tough guy, 't is but a scratch for him.

Thanks for the info, really need to see the movie in english and in full, not just part of it here and there.


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2020-Jun-2 @ 8:32 AM
Eric Storm
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neolyn wrote:

Okay , so.... report:

Yes, let's report.  Report on when you read the Critiquing Guide, please, because you didn't follow any portion of it in this review.

A bit disapointed with the chapter, it was mostly a succession of  military assholes and David somehow dealing with them.
It was intertaining but I would haved like to read something different at some point.

Gee, David... who is in... THE MILITARY... had to deal with... THE MILITARY... 

Maybe I just thought that was... oh, I don't know... RELEVANT?

The POINT was to show that being in the office is in no way more relaxing or easier for David to deal with than being in the field.  So sorry that I didn't make that clear enough for you.

Which I did with the very last part of the chapter but that was not really relevant, I guess?

I mean to sum it up it was:
David came, said hello, asked for the shield, got told to go see the ice dragon and left...

I think you could have put it almost anywhere in the chapter and it would not have change a thing.

Which means... what?  Subplots are very often moveable without changing the larger story.  This comment is meaningless.  So long as this scene happened between the last elemental-shield scene, and the next elemental-shield scene, you're right, it could be put anywhere.  I chose to put it... there.  Do you have some objection to it being there?

Maybe, it would have been better if the moment was longer and give a bit more info, not about the shield, but about the were-fox, or their culture, or something. you shut it down really quickly by a simple " Not our bussiness". That was a bit cheap.

So, you wanted me to take a chapter which was already nearly 18,000 words... and add FLUFF?  What you're asking for would have been completely and totally irrelevant to anything and everything that would come after it.  Oh, I understand the idea of world building, but don't you think FIVE CHAPTERS FROM THE END OF THE SERIES might be a little late to be worrying about it?

You call it "cheap"... I don't even know how to interpret that.  David went there for one reason.  He didn't go to explore, he didn't go to learn about were-fox culture or history.  He went there to find out about the elemental shield.  They couldn't tell him anything about it, so he left.

While I do not embrace the idea that "every word in a book must further the plot", even I have my limits on putting in pointless gibberish.

By the way there is an error when David leave REv, here it is:

"For another hour or so," Rev said with a grin in his voice.  "

Rev is a female so shouldn't it be :" Rev said with a grin in HER voice ?

I don't know about any other mistakes but that one caught my eye.

Good catch... oh, wait, no it wasn't, because REV IS A BOY.  This just proves you didn't really READ.  The FIRST were-fox was a girl, but she didn't speak English.  Rev is very clearly listed as a boy in the story.  Here is the relevant quote:

"I'm sorry, I didn't understand you.   Can you speak my language?"

Another were came up, this one apparently a boy.   "I can.   My name is Rev.   What brings you all the way out here?"

Shiwa, the first were, was a girl. 

Now what else to talk about but Joe.
What an ass. I mean okay he's dead, but doesn't he have friends and family there too ? So he doesn't have to be alone and bitter ?

Has Joe shown any ability to handle life's setbacks with equanimity?  His bitterness isn't because he's alone.  His solitude is because he's bitter.

If he doesn't like death so much, why didn't he go off himself for good in the belly of the beast that eat ghost ?

That you think that's the only way for a ghost to discorporate makes me wonder how well you've read any portion of the series.  But as an answer to the point of the question, He's smart enough to know that he may come out of this mood in the future, and so he's giving it time.  Honestly, I wouldn't expect Joe to last long as a ghost.  Some people don't.

For saying that he miss and love Zyla so much, he couldn't make the effort to properly say goodbye to her?

You are asking Joe to try to think about someone else's feelings when his own are like acid eating at his soul at the moment.

Throughout the series, I have portrayed most ghosts as being unpleasant and unhappy.  Why do you suddenly expect Joe to be something other than unpleasant and unhappy?

One of my reviewers had a spot-on insight about Joe's behavior.  Perhaps this will get through to you:  Imagine a star athlete, an Olympic gold-medalist, who is one day in some kind of accident... car crash, plane crash, whatever, something random.  He is so badly damaged that he is now a quadriplegic.

You think that person's going to deal well with someone else's pain and heartache?  That's where Joe is, mentally.

It's not like they are separate forever though. Once she dies, death isn't between the two of them anymore...

Okay, please tell me you're not actually as dumb as this makes you sound.  Assuming she lives a normal wizard life, you're talking about another 115 (or so) YEARS before Zyla would die.  She will be such a different person at that point that the very thought of the two of them getting back together is just ludicrous.  Hell, she will probably not have a decent recollection of his personality at that point.

To get back to the sucession of military assholes... was it here to introduce the David X Toni scene ? It's the only reason I see for the succession being there.

That was part of its reason for being there, yes.  Or it could be said that Toni's scene was there to show how David normally deals with his stress.

And why not go to Vivian or Glendia for stress relief ?

What have you got against Toni?  David didn't "go to" anybody.  Toni came to him.

By the way, did you know that every time David get a blow job you're always using the same words when he comes?A touch of novelty would not hurt one bit wink

By the way, did you know that this was an exceedingly condescending and asshole comment to make?  A bit of manners would not hurt one bit.

Was this chapter a break from the action/ main plot for the reader to get some room the breath a bit ?

This chapter contained the events that this chapter needed to contain in order for the plot - ALL OF the plot - to advance forward.  It's not my fault if you don't comprehend all the facets of the plot, and the fact that they need to move together.  Nor is it my fault if I didn't happen to cover the kinds of things YOU wanted to read about in this chapter.

The writting was good, as always, just the events being related not so much.

So sad for you.

Not your greatest chapter, but I guess after the previous one which I think is one of the best of the entire Woodward saga, I'm a bit biased. That and I didn't get the joke about European and African Falconswift, and I HATE when I don't get it! >sad

I would explain it, but I suddenly don't feel like it.

Do keep writitng, because this work is really nice.

Oh, thank you SO much for your "encouragement".  This is a pre-thank you, since there was no encouragement in this post.  I'm assuming you'll actually offer some genuine encouragement in the future.  Not sure WHY I'm assuming that, given your history of posts, but...

PS: Still waiting for some kind of threesome with the Hasterscant ladies (or any kind of threesome, it's been a while)

And you chose this post as a way to try to convince me?  Good thinking.

Let me make this clear to you, in an attempt to help you enjoy the rest of the book, since you obviously haven't figured it out on your own:

This book is not about the war.  This book is about David's dark side.  This chapter was very, very targeted on David's darkness, and how it is growing.  I'm SO sorry that wasn't the sort of thing you wanted to read about.  Perhaps, if that plot line doesn't interest you, you should consider skipping the rest of the book.

I would also like to point out to you:  David is a staff officer.  His actual job, charge officer for the company, is a desk job.  This chapter reflected that.  His forays into the field are actually additional assignments that he has to deal with, because of who he is.

So... not your best critique.  But, you know, keep reading, because the feedback is really... er... um... actually...  you know what?  You can stop reading, if you like.

PPS: Still waiting for a David X Helen or a David X Endora (would really like to see if the ever so strict on the sheets Endora is as strict IN the sheets if you know what I mean : D).

Don't hold your breath.

PPPS: Can Banshees have sex ?

Why would they possess that ability?

PPPPS: Will we ever see another protagonist like Rose? You know with nipple rings and a really, really kinky side ?

You already bitched because I introduced one new sex partner, and now you want me to bring in another one?  Make up your fucking mind.  Oh, and Rose was not a protagonist.  She was a support character.

From your second post:

I'm a bit disapointed with the chapter, that doesn't mean I didn't like it.

"A bit disappointed"?  Geez, it's a good thing you didn't really not like it...  For the record, your first post sounds very much like you hated the chapter.  Whether that was your intent or not is irrelevant, it was what came across.

I did have to go into such detail, what kind of critic would that be if I didn't ?

A lousy one, but you already are a lousy one, so what's the difference?

But as far as I know ( and let's be honest that's not much) authors want an honest opinion about their work.
Sure they like comments praisint it (who doesn't ?) but feeling good about it aside, those kind of comment is not really helpful.

Neither were yours.  And you want to know why?

You don't offer solutions.

With the exception of the already-covered idea of going into were-fox culture, you never offered ways to fix the problems you complained about.  That's not constructive.  That's whining.  "You need to fix X!" the reader says.  "Well, how do I need to fix X?" the writer asks.  "Just... fix it!" the reader demands.  "If I knew how to make it better," the author replies, "don't you think I would have done it already?"

There's a reason that my reviewers are my reviewers:  When they say they don't like something, they offer a way to make it better.  I may or may not accept that idea.  I might not agree there's anything wrong with the scene in question, but they've given me an option.  You didn't.  All you did was complain.

I create games, I want and need to see what people thinks about my work, not just " hey it's good/bad" I want to know the why behind it, that's what is really important so I can do better next time.

And do you find it helpful when someone says, "Hey, I don't like how this character interacts with the player," and leaves it at that?  If you already knew how to fix what they're complaining about, why haven't you done it already?  Stating a problem without giving a solution is whining, not reviewing.

I think every single person who's really into making something share that feeling.
Yes sometimes it sucks, that people think negativly of what we put time and effort to make, but that's life.

Actually, that's not life.  That you think it is, is what's wrong with your post.  Had you taken the time and effort to write your post in a non-offensive way, your message would have had a tenfold better chance at being heard in a way you wanted it to be.  What I heard from you, instead, was a bunch of infantile crying and whining because your mother gave you Apple Jacks instead of Fruit Loops.

Besides Eric is a tough guy, 't is but a scratch for him.

Wow.  Just... wow.  You don't even know me in the slightest, and you can make a statement like this.  Even given the number of times I've talked about suffering depression, anxiety, difficulties with stress... you can sit there and make a comment like this.

You, sir, are an asshole.

Eric Storm


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Please Remember:  The right to Freedom of Speech does not carry the proviso, "As long as it doesn't upset anyone."  The US Constitution does not grant you the right to not be offended.  If you don't like what someone's saying... IGNORE THEM.
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Please don't be an asshole to me, because then I'll have to be an asshole to you... and I'm MUCH better at being an asshole than you are.
2020-Jun-2 @ 6:18 PM
Bandaid
Tipsy
Member since 2016-Jan-22
Posts: 2

Very good I enjoy the whole series of books. I hope there is more very soon. Keep up the good work and the quality. All the best for the future.

(posted from Chapter 2: July)


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