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2018-Mar-11 @ 7:02 PM
waaum
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Member since 2017-Jun-20
Posts: 3

Keep on going. You're going in great wink

Just, if I may offer my advice, keep in mind not to overdo it with all the new characters, relations and hook-ups. I feel like the original strength of this story was that it was only centered around a select few characters, enabling strong character building. Add too many and it'll start dilluting and confusing.

Nevertheless, still love it.

(posted from the Item Information Page)


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2018-Mar-12 @ 7:03 PM
bistander
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Member since 2015-Sep-3
Posts: 92

waaum wrote:

Keep on going. You're going in great wink

Just, if I may offer my advice, keep in mind not to overdo it with all the new characters, relations and hook-ups. I feel like the original strength of this story was that it was only centered around a select few characters, enabling strong character building. Add too many and it'll start dilluting and confusing.

Nevertheless, still love it.

(posted from the Item Information Page)

Thank you and thanks for the advice. You are spot on. The problem(which I created because I'm stupid) with writing something like this and posting it chapter by chapter over too long a period of time is that people get in your ear about what they want and I get inspired and stuff some new thing in there. My main focus right now is to bring this story to a conclusion. After that, there could be a part two; a plotless fuckathon that folks will love on the other sites.


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2018-Mar-24 @ 9:48 PM
coachc32
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Member since 2016-Nov-19
Posts: 6

Any word on 24? It's been awhile since 23. I'm sure it'll be worth the wait though. Hope all is well.

(posted from the Item Information Page)


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2018-Mar-25 @ 5:42 PM
mwahoo
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Member since 2017-Dec-30
Posts: 6

coachc32 wrote:

Any word on 24? It's been awhile since 23. I'm sure it'll be worth the wait though. Hope all is well.

(posted from the Item Information Page)

Or any chance of Pre-release work for review and comment to help?


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2018-Mar-26 @ 5:48 AM
bistander
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Member since 2015-Sep-3
Posts: 92

mwahoo wrote:

Or any chance of Pre-release work for review and comment to help?

That is always my favorite comment. I hope you're not just blowing smoke up my ass to see if I'm working. Any chance you're good at spotting mistakes?


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2018-Mar-26 @ 9:23 AM
mwahoo
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Member since 2017-Dec-30
Posts: 6

bistander wrote:

mwahoo wrote:

Or any chance of Pre-release work for review and comment to help?

That is always my favorite comment. I hope you're not just blowing smoke up my ass to see if I'm working. Any chance you're good at spotting mistakes?

extremely good

part of my profession


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2018-Mar-26 @ 7:07 PM
bistander
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Posts: 92

Sounds awesome. The last person helping me, who was an excellent editor, is in college and is starting a business, so he's quite busy.
The way he and I work was through Google Doc. I'd post in the there and share it with him. He'd highlight errors and leave comments.
I'm open to other ideas, but if that works send me an email message through the Pub.


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2018-Mar-27 @ 5:18 AM
mwahoo
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Member since 2017-Dec-30
Posts: 6

bistander wrote:

Sounds awesome. The last person helping me, who was an excellent editor, is in college and is starting a business, so he's quite busy.
The way he and I work was through Google Doc. I'd post in the there and share it with him. He'd highlight errors and leave comments.
I'm open to other ideas, but if that works send me an email message through the Pub.

Got handed a " project" today that will tie me up probably beyond your publish date.  That being said,  my level of edit may
be harder and more rigid than you need ( based on stories I have read)  If I get loose,  I will reach out.  For now I anxiously await
Good luck


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2018-Mar-27 @ 8:23 AM
bistander
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Posts: 92

mwahoo, why wouldn't I want to have my work edited to a standard that could be sent to the editor at a publishing company? What you see in my work is the best I can do at this point. Read the stuff I wrote in 2009 and you'll see how much I've learned. I'm still learning, but I'm so busy chopping wood that I don't have time to sharpen the ax.


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2018-Mar-29 @ 6:28 AM
X2th3Z
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Member since 2018-Mar-27
Posts: 1

Literally check every day for updates on this story and nothing else on this site , hope 24 will be up soon


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2018-Mar-29 @ 8:52 AM
thehilz
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Member since 2010-Sep-7
Posts: 207

While you wait for the next chapter in this story you should look around the site because there are plenty of other stories/authors that I’m sure you will find something else you will like as well.


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2018-Mar-31 @ 8:16 AM
bistander
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Posts: 92

X2th3Z wrote:

Literally check every day for updates on this story and nothing else on this site , hope 24 will be up soon

Yeah, I know. I don't understand what happened to me and this story. I've struggled and procrastinated and dicked around writing other stories. I do have a bunch written and I am editing it, so keep checking back and as thehilz said, check out the other stories. There are some great authors on this site.

Send me an email through the site and I'll send you a message when the chapter is done. Then you won't have to be disappointed when you don't see it here.


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2018-Apr-2 @ 2:26 AM
bistander
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Posts: 92

I sure wish I had somebody to proofread this chapter and give me a title. I've spent my whole weekend on it. I'm posting it here tomorrow even if I don't find someone, and you'll have only yourselves to blame for the errors.


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2018-Apr-5 @ 6:10 PM
farok
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Member since 2017-Sep-28
Posts: 4

""Not today, nah. I'll do that tomorrow. Tomorrow comes and it's still today. Tomorrow is a relative term. We're not getting there."

~Bo Burnham

Jokes aside, really looking forward to the next chapter!

(posted from the Item Information Page)


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2018-Apr-10 @ 3:55 PM
Jenson.P
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Member since 2018-Apr-4
Posts: 1

bistander wrote:

I sure wish I had somebody to proofread this chapter and give me a title. I've spent my whole weekend on it. I'm posting it here tomorrow even if I don't find someone, and you'll have only yourselves to blame for the errors.

Hey Bistander,
  Been following you since you first posted this story and I created this account just to let you know that I check the page for updates every single day. Hope it will be ready soon. But of course if you don't think it's ready yet, take all the time you need smile


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2018-Apr-13 @ 6:48 AM
bistander
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Member since 2015-Sep-3
Posts: 92

Thank you Jenson. It was ready last week, but I reconsidered and added two more pieces at the end that without it seemed I had cheated the readers and maybe even Darlene. I hope to wrap it up soon.

Now that you're on this awesome site, check out some of the stories here. There are some great authors here. Hopefully, you won't find them so interesting that you forget about me. big_smile


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2018-Apr-13 @ 1:33 PM
oldgymrat71
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Member since 2018-Apr-13
Posts: 2

This author is learning quickly and her raw intelligence is worthy of your time.

(posted from Chapter 4: Its Dangerous to Squeeze the Charmin)


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2018-Apr-13 @ 11:09 PM
Eric Storm
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Member since 2006-Sep-13
Posts: 3909

Um.... I'm pretty sure the author in question is a "him", not a "her"...

Eric Storm


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2018-Apr-14 @ 12:55 AM
oldgymrat71
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Member since 2018-Apr-13
Posts: 2

Eric, in spite of your surety I find the stories have a definite feminine touch. This is probably one of the reasons I like them.


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2018-Apr-14 @ 4:02 AM
Eric Storm
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Well, let's put it this way: I know this person's first name.  Unless their parents were VERY odd, it's a "him".

Eric Storm

PS:  Not every man thinks the same way.  Not every woman thinks the same way.  Some men do think like women.  Some women do think like men.  A man could have a more feminine writing style.  A woman could have a more masculine writing style.  Suffice to say, you like this author's style, which has nothing to do with whether it's a man, woman, or chimpanzee.


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Please Remember:  The right to Freedom of Speech does not carry the proviso, "As long as it doesn't upset anyone."  The US Constitution does not grant you the right to not be offended.  If you don't like what someone's saying... IGNORE THEM.
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2018-Jun-15 @ 11:21 PM
bistander
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Posts: 92

Why didn't somebody tell me that my closing quotes are being changed into dashes? Come on, the story is not so exciting that you shouldn't notice something like that. Not sure when this started or why, but I'm working with Eric to resolve it.


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2018-Jun-16 @ 1:16 AM
Eric Storm
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Posts: 3909

Um... just to be clear, the question Bistander should be asking is why you weren't telling ME that his closing quotes were wrong, since it is a violation of site policy for you to bitch to an author about something like that...

Eric Storm


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Please Remember:  The right to Freedom of Speech does not carry the proviso, "As long as it doesn't upset anyone."  The US Constitution does not grant you the right to not be offended.  If you don't like what someone's saying... IGNORE THEM.
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2018-Jun-17 @ 12:15 AM
bistander
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Posts: 92

Eric Storm wrote:

Um... just to be clear, the question Bistander should be asking is why you weren't telling ME that his closing quotes were wrong, since it is a violation of site policy for you to bitch to an author about something like that...

Eric Storm

Oh yeah, that's right, bitch at Eric. That's a load off my back. Is it okay if they point out my mistakes so I know not to do it again? I don't mean like, "You should have let that dog fuck Becky," but things like, spelled something incorrectly or used the wrong word? Not that I make mistakes, but on the off chance that one slips through. tongue :-P


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2018-Jun-17 @ 12:22 AM
Eric Storm
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Member since 2006-Sep-13
Posts: 3909

Well, things that are very obviously under the author's control, such as word choice, they should send to you.  But I think it's pretty reasonable to expect that everyone knows what quotation marks are supposed to look like, so when they start seeing dashes instead, it's probably not the author's fault.

And yes, if they feel that you should have let the dog fuck Becky, they should send that to you, too. 
:-P

Eric Storm

PS:  Before some annoying person points out that quotation marks look like something else in other languages, let me once more reiterate that the language of this website is ENGLISH, and only English is supported.


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Please Remember:  The right to Freedom of Speech does not carry the proviso, "As long as it doesn't upset anyone."  The US Constitution does not grant you the right to not be offended.  If you don't like what someone's saying... IGNORE THEM.
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AMEN! >>> Word Crimes
2018-Jun-17 @ 12:26 AM
Eric Storm
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Member since 2006-Sep-13
Posts: 3909

The short version here is:  If you're unsure of who might have caused the problem, contact the webmaster.  I can always contact the author myself if the problem is on their end.  But a large percentage of authors will not be able to tell for sure if a problem is their fault or mine.  As an example, in Bistander's case, he was trying to figure out how to fix his formatting problem himself... but there was no way for him to do so, because the problem was at my end.  (That problem has been corrected, btw.)

Eric Storm


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Please Remember:  The right to Freedom of Speech does not carry the proviso, "As long as it doesn't upset anyone."  The US Constitution does not grant you the right to not be offended.  If you don't like what someone's saying... IGNORE THEM.
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AMEN! >>> Word Crimes