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2008-Jun-20 @ 6:38 AM
drestnar
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Member since 2008-Jun-20
Posts: 3

Hey, your writing is superb. You have everything in one novel, suspense, thriller, mystery and the loss of main characters. These make a novel beleivable and entertaing as all hell to read. I have read alot of novels in the pub, yet can say that I am on the edge of my seat. This does not happen often as that most writers use the same plot lines. Congrats on a well written and thought out story. Keep it up!!!!!

(posted from the Item Information Page)


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2008-Jun-23 @ 1:59 PM
drestnar
Tipsy
Member since 2008-Jun-20
Posts: 3

I am cracking up man. This is some hilarious shit. I have tears in my eyes. Holy crap....

(posted from Chapter 18)


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2008-Sep-18 @ 12:00 AM
LeoSolaris
Tipsy
Member since 2007-Mar-9
Posts: 3

Awesome story! I really enjoyed it. It will be interesting to see where the last few chapters takes us.

P.S. I rather like the balance between sexual writing and storyline.

(posted from Chapter 20)


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“Writing a book is an adventure. To begin with, it is a toy and an amusement; then it becomes a mistress, and then it becomes a master, and then a tyrant. The last phase is that just as you are about to be reconciled to your servitude, you kill the monster, and fling him out to the public.”
Winston Churchill
2008-Nov-27 @ 10:03 AM
unknown1000u2
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Member since 2008-Feb-4
Posts: 76

Ok, I've changed my mind.  I'm just going to post the rest of book 1 here without waiting to re-edit it.  It's taking too long (my fault, not the editor).  I will repost each chapter as I re-edit it.  That way, I can get book 1 on here and then get going on book 2 and 3 here.  I will likely finish posting book 1 Thanksgiving week.  Just keep in mind that I am eventually cleaning up Book 1.


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2008-Dec-11 @ 12:53 PM
kizzy
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Member since 2008-Dec-11
Posts: 1

I'm glad i found this site. I've read the entire first book on another website and can't wait until the rest is posted.. Hopefully you haven't left this site to another because it took a while to find this one..lol

(posted from the Item Information Page)


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2008-Dec-14 @ 10:33 PM
unknown1000u2
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Member since 2008-Feb-4
Posts: 76

Ok, I'm finally getting around to posting the resat of My Girls as I promised to do over Thanksgiving weekend.  Just keep in mind that everything beyond chapter 22 has not had the re-editing that is being worked on.  I will repost those chapters as they are done and announce them here.   Just be kind... this was my first story I wrote, so it desperately needs the re-editing, at least in my opinion.  The re-editing will not change the content or the story... I have added a few sentences here and there, but nothing significant.  It just changes sentence structure, wording, spelling, etc. 

Enjoy.  After I finish posting MG's, I will start posting MG 2.  That and MG 3 have already been edited.


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2009-Feb-10 @ 7:35 AM
edvardlavea
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Member since 2007-Oct-10
Posts: 17

I am just starting chapter 9 and i am fully engrossed in the story. The sex is very well written, but the character development is extraordinary. I hope you enjoy your time at the pub and continue to write gotta get back to the story I want to know what happens next.....

(posted from the Item Information Page)


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The only limit to our realization of tomorrow will be our doubts of today - Franklin D. Roosevelt
2009-Feb-11 @ 11:02 AM
edvardlavea
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Member since 2007-Oct-10
Posts: 17

WOW! Awesome book i am about to start the next. Thank you!

(posted from the Item Information Page)


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The only limit to our realization of tomorrow will be our doubts of today - Franklin D. Roosevelt
2009-Feb-16 @ 6:44 AM
edvardlavea
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Member since 2007-Oct-10
Posts: 17

I think that this story is an amazing achievement of erotic literature. I would recommend this story to anyone interested in the genre. Thank you for posting it. I can't wait to read the next book.


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The only limit to our realization of tomorrow will be our doubts of today - Franklin D. Roosevelt
2009-Aug-29 @ 4:21 PM
SnakeEater
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Member since 2009-Aug-29
Posts: 16

1/3 of the way through & I HAD to add this to my favorites, GREAT story so far.

(posted from Chapter 10)


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2009-Aug-30 @ 12:52 AM
SnakeEater
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Member since 2009-Aug-29
Posts: 16

I will tell the author one thing, If you are writing fiction professionally PLEASE let me what name to look for & I will buy whatever you are writing!

(posted from Chapter 33)


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2009-Dec-13 @ 2:30 AM
Bd.Carlo
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Member since 2009-Nov-7
Posts: 62

very nice story, well written, and I thought that '24' was an absolutely brilliant name for a privet, high end, paramilitary organization.

(posted from Chapter 33)


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"Genius may have its limitations, but stupidity is not thus handicapped."  Elbert Hubbard
"A bookstore is one of the only pieces of evidence we have that people are still thinking." Jerry Seinfeld
2010-Jan-10 @ 3:56 PM
edvardlavea
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Member since 2007-Oct-10
Posts: 17

SnakeEater wrote:

I will tell the author one thing, If you are writing fiction professionally PLEASE let me what name to look for & I will buy whatever you are writing!

(posted from Chapter 33)

I often wonder about that. The quality of of the work posted here... it is hard for me to believe that none of my favorite contributes here, are not aslo published authors.


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The only limit to our realization of tomorrow will be our doubts of today - Franklin D. Roosevelt
2010-Oct-6 @ 6:23 AM
Nadez
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Member since 2009-Jun-6
Posts: 201

Just started reading, Normally I just read Eric's stuff but I must say after just a few chapters I got very engrossed in your story quite brilliant work. Im curious if your still around? Very good writing one way or another. I plan on finishing this book and moving on to the others promptly


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2010-Oct-6 @ 7:10 AM
unknown1000u2
Contributor
Member since 2008-Feb-4
Posts: 76

Yep, still around.  Working on the epilogue of book 3 now.    Glad you like it.  Enjoy the rest of the three books.


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2010-Oct-6 @ 9:48 AM
Nadez
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Posts: 201

Thank you smile I'll post as I finish each book to give you my thoughts, That is if your interested


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2010-Oct-6 @ 9:52 AM
unknown1000u2
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Member since 2008-Feb-4
Posts: 76

always interested in feedback.


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2011-Jan-10 @ 2:03 PM
StoryJunkie
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Member since 2010-Dec-31
Posts: 169

I just finished the first book, I came here for a story from Eric, but then I decided to see what the other writers brought to the table. I was floored by this story, I couldn't wait to get through each chapter. I'm getting the second one now to read and can't wait to see what changes come.

(posted from the Item Information Page)


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2011-Jan-12 @ 9:12 AM
Caliburn
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Member since 2010-Aug-28
Posts: 7

The 2nd book is rough but great. The 3rd ... isn't finished yet. Great stories though.


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2012-Jul-9 @ 11:12 AM
shrotycg
Tipsy
Member since 2011-Feb-24
Posts: 4

Anyone know what LOP stands for. It is used twice in the story.

I felt the love of LOP in my mind, wishing she had had that growing up.

This had worked before with LOP; I hoped it would work now or I was going to be forced to slap her to calm her down.


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2012-Jul-9 @ 1:38 PM
lordalpha
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Member since 2007-Jan-26
Posts: 139

LOP is the acronym for Little Orange Person.


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2012-Jul-13 @ 6:05 AM
dreaw
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Member since 2011-Nov-27
Posts: 83

the whole series is great it inspired me to write again


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2015-Nov-24 @ 9:01 AM
old-dog
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Member since 2014-Jun-22
Posts: 2

This my fourth or fifth time reading this book of "My Girls" , sixth or seventh for the original "My Girls" . I love the series and would love to see an PG version for general comsumption . I like this better than the following , in that "Patrick" gits pissed about being kept in the dark by the women . I have a great love for the women in my life but I have "Butted Heads" with all of them , from spanking Great neices to arguing with my mother . I like the charactor , however I really can't see him as a leader I would follow . Yes he is powerful but never proactive . He tries to put him self out there in the last book and get a spine but "oh no , don't kill the people trying to kill your Family" , Their just "misunderstood" ! Many said that the NAZI'S where misunderstood , we all know how that worked out , we're still dealing with that shit . I uderstand women being a calming affect on men but being the stick and carrot I'm not so sure . That being said , I think this is a great series , you don't to know what I think about JRRT'S works or the Potter books. Feel free to respond .

(posted from Chapter 33)


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2016-Jan-17 @ 5:46 AM
Rescue25
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Member since 2014-Jul-7
Posts: 122

Saw that one coming.
Waiting to see where the training came from.

(posted from Chapter 17)


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2016-Jan-18 @ 9:26 AM
Rescue25
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Member since 2014-Jul-7
Posts: 122

Very interesting.  You did cost me a number of hours sleep. Could not put it down i the last several chapters.

Looking forward to the next book.

B

(posted from Chapter 33)


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